have potential but character design and story development didnt work well but still real story plot is starting so I will read and change my review in future. .currently you are writing most chapter which is same as mahwa so please dont do it in future because it can make readers who have already readed manhwa bored.

nice eleceed fanfic. since there are only a few can't really complain to much. other than it being facepaced and bzztttt bzutttt it's a decent read. thanks author sama for making it

Hello my friend, try to make this character reach the top ten before starting the plot Hello my friend, try to make this character reach the top ten before starting the plot

It's a good fanfic, it's unique since mc does what he want and he is the original mc's twin so that's a plus and being kayden's disciple is another plus but i Don't get it he supposed to have 200+ iq but he is just average when it comes to being smart he literally forgot to ask the assassins who wanted him dead and other stupid actions like missing up 2 associations at the same time and not expecting that the other guy will ambush him while he is fighting the other guy

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I really love this story. It is one of the rare novel/fanfic that I'm always impatient to read the rest. Can't wait to see where it's going to go. Pls never drop this piece of art,

This is a terrible story, the mc went from a normal to someone that thinks he’s above everyone. And the author has a habbit of just pulling shi out their ah. Don’t really this if you want a good story, it’s a waste of time.

Realmente uma boa história, parabéns eu gostei bastante e estou viciado Espero que você sacie meu vício com lançamentos constantes 😂 AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAABBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBBB

Well, the overall story is fine. But I would work on how you write the fanfiction. For example: you are currently writing it like this Kayden: What kayden says (what happens for example he evades an explosion) But what I whould do is Kayden: “something that kayden says” and then say things that happen between just without the () and if he says something in the same paragraph just begin again with the”” I would also work on the sound effects that you use. There are a lot of BOOOMSS BZZZT etc. I think it would be more readable to minimalize the sound effects, and replace them with just text. For exaple you just write the number 98 fires an explosion at kayden and he evades to the right an immediatky tries to electocute him with an electric spear or someting like that. The last thing I would like to say is that I think it would nice if you can gice the characters names instead of Top 98. I understand that you want to keep some characters secret with the question marks but I don’t think it will be a problem to name the other characters. You can even use a random name generator or something. Well that was all I hope the advice is usefull.