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It's okay... The Grammer is Great but the rat is a bit too smart I also feel the price for being reborn was also a bit small too allow being reborn with all his memories even if they don't help any other being could get the genocide achievement especially since he got it from plague bearer which any rat could get humans even easier(assuming this is a medieval society)but I assume he got the achievement because he killed several humans way above him in the food chain but it would be better to clarify. I also feel like it would've been better to have the rat have high luck from birth so you can justify him getting lucky enough to kill a whole city and actually using his Ap and if it's too hard to write a non Sapient Mc just say he was born with high mental stats too.The plot armor is thick I don't feel any tension I know the protag is gonna win. another thing I find a bit forced is his skill selection I think a rat would be guided by its instincts, a feeling of something along the lines of I want to be strong and the system will translate that into a skill suitable would be for the choose a skill part. Also there isn't much detail of the surrounding I only know [Rat is infront of spider]. I'm by no means a writer and ive only read 3 chapter, so far, so take this with a grain a salt.
A Rat’s Second Chance (Old)
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As this is my first time writing anything like this, and now I’ve written a little more and thought about it more, I see the exact same problem. After I wrote a bit, I realized I might have made the mc too op, and that there was no tension. It’s easy to predict and the system is too powerful and in favor of the mc. After writing more, I also realized I made the mc too intelligent for it to be making these conscious decisions. I feel the mc should be closer to barely sentient, but slowly and slowly gaining more awareness as it increases in strength like Chesty in Everybody Loves Large Chests. The series is heavily based off of ELLC, and even a few of the scenes are inspired quite heavily based off of scenes in ELLC. Still, I find it enjoyable to write and I’m too lazy to go back and fix it, so I’ll just continue with what I have now. I really enjoy critisicim like this as I know it’ll help me craft better stories in the future and improve the ones I’m currently working on.