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The_Ram_TS
The_Ram_TSLv31yr
2024-02-19 22:15

No está mal, pero, el protagonista comienza a perder protagonismo. Esto no estaría mal en una película o una novela de un profesional, pero esto es un fanfiction y mientras más complejo algo que debería ser sencillo, más tedioso se vuelve intentar leerlo.

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Dieudonner_17
Dieudonner_17Lv5

Writing quality 4 stars: Little little mistakes and punctuation errors here and there(would have given 5 stars but sorry I have ocd) Updating stability: I dropped this story once because I thought it was dropped😅😅😅sorry if there were real life problems but it receives 3 stars Story Development 3 stars: What’s going on I know(saw it from authors thoughts) that you’re confident with what you’re doing but personally I’m not seeing anything. Plot is as meh as it is to me. Only reason it’s three and not two or one is because it maintains that semblance of medieval life(no offense) and that author is not afraid to change the plot(far better than ones where they rehash canon but are weirdly proud of it thinking they’re writing masterpieces😅😅😅) no offense. Character development 1 star: Excuse me in advance I’m going to be harsh with this. Scrap off your mc. I don’t know what you were thinking to make a reincarnated person blush to kids and stammer when interacting with someone like oberyn whereas he’s smooth to giants like olenna Stick to one(personally you shouldn’t have made him reincarnated, would have made things better and more understanding) Mcs training and all that excess things I see are cos 90(no effect). In fact it’s trash(that’s how bad the character development is). Only redeemed by the fact that writing quality world background and story development can pique one’s interest. Otherwise, bleh. World development 4 stars: Author doesn’t seem scared of adding his own tidbits to the planetos setting(wonderful).

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