Of course there will be lemons, right? If not, the reader will be disappointed .

The worse type of grammar is one that tries to sound correct but have errors here and there. It's readable but not for me. A tip for non English writers/speakers, say the sentence out loud and see if it sounds right or not. If you're not sure reference other grammatically correct novels or use a writing tool. (Grammarly)

5☆ for good taste. do you plan to write lemons/şêx?. Mikan and Lala best waifus[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp] will save and allow chapters to accumulate first

Finally a To Love Ru with daily updates proper lemons yep expecting not to drop this fic..................................................................

The concept of the story is good, the mc feels a little hollow and the grammar needs some corrections to make it a smooth read. I think with some improvement it can become a great story.

As a person that read countless fanfictions, I would like to edit your chapters if you want. Usually, even if the premise of your story is good, if your grammar is not that good many people will drop your novel because it ruins their reading experience. Even me, I'm currently reading chapter 3 but the grammar made me come here to criticize the grammar. This story looks good but the grammar is seriously ruining it, so if it's okay to you I would really like to edit your chapters grammatical errors.

Now an important advice from a heavy FF reader. Please don't be impulse in increasing the mc powers, and making his strong or op very fast. Baby steps, build ur story structure with care, don't go and make him pick Pokémon left and right. But slowly build your charactersin development and interaction between female characters and the mc. Most hasty Characters development ends up with failure and dropping. I hope that I won't see another dropped FF. I have jsut said this because a lot of FF these days drop Half way.

Man it’s so tough to read 😂 But it’s quite interesting even though I’m suffering! You should stop using past tense verbs as much as you do, and try to learn basic sentence structuring, so that you don’t mess up the order. Just genuine advise, I think if you stick to it, you’d be able to improve the story 20-30% Everything is great man, never stop learning and trying!

Everyone should give it a try although it starts horrible for a couple of chapters, it started to improve. Maybe you will quit after a couple of chapters but you try a couple more as it might be up on your taste.

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