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Woshi
WoshiLv52yr
2022-08-06 20:46

The worse type of grammar is one that tries to sound correct but have errors here and there. It's readable but not for me. A tip for non English writers/speakers, say the sentence out loud and see if it sounds right or not. If you're not sure reference other grammatically correct novels or use a writing tool. (Grammarly)

Exploring the World of To Love Ru

Ayries_Jesea
4.5
78 Chs

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Ayries_Jesea
Ayries_JeseaAuthor

I actually used Grammarly and this fanfic is just a way for me to practice my English and writing skills

2yr
Yo_Aibo
Yo_AiboLv3

Maybe you used Grammarly. But your use of commas and capital letters is a mess. Just telling, not gonna offended.

Ayries_Jesea:I actually used Grammarly and this fanfic is just a way for me to practice my English and writing skills
2yr
Ayries_Jesea
Ayries_JeseaAuthor

not offended English is not even my main language

Yo_Aibo:Maybe you used Grammarly. But your use of commas and capital letters is a mess. Just telling, not gonna offended.
2yr
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Woshi
WoshiLv5

Did you post this to the wrong section/page? I don't remember much of the story but I don't recall any bleach aspects in this To Love Ru story.

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2yr
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Greed_X
Greed_XLv4

Of course there will be lemons, right? If not, the reader will be disappointed .

2yr

TFH
TFHLv6

5☆ for good taste. do you plan to write lemons/şêx?. Mikan and Lala best waifus[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp] will save and allow chapters to accumulate first

2yr
VenerableZay
VenerableZayLv4

Finally a To Love Ru with daily updates proper lemons yep expecting not to drop this fic..................................................................

2yr
Kitsune_Raijin
Kitsune_RaijinLv14

The concept of the story is good, the mc feels a little hollow and the grammar needs some corrections to make it a smooth read. I think with some improvement it can become a great story.

2yr
Baqua
BaquaLv4

As a person that read countless fanfictions, I would like to edit your chapters if you want. Usually, even if the premise of your story is good, if your grammar is not that good many people will drop your novel because it ruins their reading experience. Even me, I'm currently reading chapter 3 but the grammar made me come here to criticize the grammar. This story looks good but the grammar is seriously ruining it, so if it's okay to you I would really like to edit your chapters grammatical errors.

2yr
Chaos_Order8
Chaos_Order8Lv5

Now an important advice from a heavy FF reader. Please don't be impulse in increasing the mc powers, and making his strong or op very fast. Baby steps, build ur story structure with care, don't go and make him pick Pokémon left and right. But slowly build your charactersin development and interaction between female characters and the mc. Most hasty Characters development ends up with failure and dropping. I hope that I won't see another dropped FF. I have jsut said this because a lot of FF these days drop Half way.

2yr
Maybeshewill
MaybeshewillLv2

Man it’s so tough to read 😂 But it’s quite interesting even though I’m suffering! You should stop using past tense verbs as much as you do, and try to learn basic sentence structuring, so that you don’t mess up the order. Just genuine advise, I think if you stick to it, you’d be able to improve the story 20-30% Everything is great man, never stop learning and trying!

2yr
Erl_Rol
Erl_RolLv1

Everyone should give it a try although it starts horrible for a couple of chapters, it started to improve. Maybe you will quit after a couple of chapters but you try a couple more as it might be up on your taste.

2yr
Lucifer515
Lucifer515Lv4

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