Review Detail of Ian_White in Black Clover: Training system
Review detail
Writing quality is abysmal. The sentence structure worse than a teenagers. I read about 10 chapters and it took me 30 minutes because of the migraine it gave me in the first chapter. There are commas where there should be spaces, capitalization is non-existent, and the flow doesn’t match in any sentence. It feels as if each sentence is a thought and not apart of the paragraph. Updates appear to be every 2-3 days, so no problem with stability. Story Development is hardly noticeable due to the bad writing quality. If I had to give it a rating it would be average. Character Design is barely up to par. Most of the characters are already made (it is a fan-fic after all) and the writer shows a moderate ability to copy the original story design. The original characters made were average in quality with no good or bad points to critique. World Background is not explained much, though it is a given considering the story is about. It would be nice to have an explanation/refresher on the power systems introduced so I give it a mediocre rating.
Black Clover: Training system
MynameJeff
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The writer can do better with writing quality, the character designs can also be better, and I already said that it was understandable that there wasn’t much world building. Everything wrong or bad about the writing is because the writer is either not skilled/educated or they didn’t bother to put in enough effort when writing. Why does it seem like you are pushing the blame for the crappy writing away from the writer and onto the readers? There isn’t anything we can do about the sub-par writing aside from letting the writer know by giving an honest review. That means highlighting the flaws and commending the positive aspects. It is a shame that any good aspects of the content was hidden away by the mediocre grammar, atrocious sentence structure, and the barely noticeable pacing.
Yuinetro:Cant do much about writing quality, character design are up to the author so cant do anything there. It is assumed that reader has world knowledge, (also people dont like explaining worlds and background, the description is provided in wikis, so no need for repetition.)
