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2022-07-15 11:00

I found the story to be creative and overall the writing quality was perfect. I didn't find that many grammar mistakes. I found that the way you built the character development in the novel to be a lot more realistic that other novels where out of nowhere the mc become op or fought like a veteran. Though that doesn't mean the story is slow the pace of the story in my opinion was perfect and how you kept suspense at certain parts of the novel was perfect overall I think this is one of the best Naruto fanfictions you can find. Good job author-san!!!

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Thank you.

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I don't see how people could read more than 10 chapters of this, the story reads like a diary, we literally knew nothing about his time in the academy. All we know about the academy is he showed up, got friends somewhere in between the year or more, that he fights, and he took the chunin exam, That took 2 chapters to breeze through the academy but the author still somehow found a way to make the mc lose "On purpose" and gave us no reason, just told us he didn't. I don't like when stories try to make the mc actually weak when they were stated to be "Overpowered" and has all these abilities to make winning as easy as possible. When he had 5 wishes to become op, he uses none of them for most of his time I've read. I could forgive half of this if the story didn't feel like he just spawned in, no one knows him besides the people who raised him, Nobody thinks he's a Nara since he doesn't look like it, most of the characters don't even acknowledge him, we've heard 4 people talk, teacher, itachi, random friend, and his uncle(Might be missing 1 person since he probably only had 1 sentence until he disappears. The story reads like we're reading a script of the actions of the characters, it doesn't feel like we're reading a story. Everything about this is, sorry to say this author, trash. Writing quality 1 star for the "story" or whatever diary you're coughing up. Stability 3 as normal. Story development is 1 since getting far in the story is hard with basically no knowledge given by the author, if i didn't have a friend who watches naruto and tells me about it, I would have even less of an idea of what's happening. Character Design 1 star, absolutely none, we're given what changed about him and nothing else, blank slate, npc that respawned, new save folder, whatever you want to call that tragedy of a start, much less him not using his wishes(Besides experience) to do anything to the point if you had said "MC in naruto with experience from top fighters" it'd be more helpful to the story. World background 1 star, Not inclusive to people who saw this fanfic but had no knowledge of naruto, to put it into perspective, if you had told a reader who knew nothing about Naruto that this was an original work they'd believe it 100% since nothing else is this terrible. Now I know what you're going to say "You didn't read enough" but I read enough to know this was a lost cause when we got a speed read through most of the important parts. I'm not going to respond to anyone criticizing this since there's a good chance I'll forget this existed once I wake up and I barely use this site anymore.

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