So let’ start with the easy parts Grammar is ok with no major flaws even though it feels ‘clunky’ at times. Updating stability is good I guess, doesn’t really matter to me Story development is where the novel starts to suck. The main reason behind this is the author’s lack of detail and rushed mindset. The author keeps giving the mc OP skills when he could have gone the proper growth route and it would have been so much more interesting. I understand his first Mana Control skill being SSS due to it being from his grandfather. However, every other skill he gets is sss tier when it just ruins the system part of the story. Why would a child just using mana for the first time get a sss tier skill every time he thinks of something. A better author move would have the mc be able to create said skill but it is like tier F, and it requires usage to upgrade it. And then there are the skills that don’t deserve sss tier of ranking like his lightning bolt skill. The dude just pumped mana into it, so why don’t u go with a scaling meter in the skill that can push its power to higher tier ranking. The whole sss tier from the beginning completely makes his skill set irrelevant and u could just skip all fight scenes from then on bc all the author does is the kid mana reads, then he ’gains experience’ as the author refers to it. There is no action and it is just pushing the mc from one place to another. Even the romance is forced to the extent, in a very bad way if u think usually the forced romance shows most in the girls, that the girls are more understandable than the one-dimensional mc. And to the deplorable character design. Along with the skills said above the author can’t really seem to fully define and therefore develop the mc. He adds in a couple sentences that the mc went to dojos to explain his fighting experience. Then keeps talking about his grandfathers teachings even though we know none of them, the author tells none of them, and the mc displays none of them. The only thing we know is the grandfather had a harem and the author forces the mc to have the same liking for it. I’m saying forced here bc the author didn’t flesh out his mc and just threw a lot of ‘past’ stuff on a character without showing any real character identity. It was as if the author was just pulling from his hat to describe how and why the mc reacted in some way right before he does it. Honestly, it was sad how the girls were better written than the mc and they had the flaw of being forced romance characters. It was honestly really hard to get to ch 25 with how little character development there was. World background gets a 3 star only cause it was an interesting premise that was pulled down by the mc’s character. I would honestly want to tell the author to go back to the beginning of his story, completely rewrite ch 1-15, adding more story to better develop and reveal who our mc is along with taking more time to flesh out the story. I can’t even bring myself to read farther due to how little I care for an mc who gets op powers and doesn’t either deserve it in my, the reader’s, eyes or doesn’t use them in an interesting and new way. It is just him getting an attack skill, a defense skill( along with the author bsing and just saying he got a ton more by just thinking less expenditure I mean how lazy can u be writing author), and a perceive skill. That is literally it. Overall I wish the writing could have been better, not a problem grammar wise just pure story writing horror. The lackluster system components and how the author just gives it out like candy with no thinking for the long term longevity of his story. This is one of those stories where u read 25 chapters only to get out of it that the mc is op and the girls are interesting. Not in a good way, i mean in that I literally can’t remember any other notable things. Just a waste of my time reading really. I was kinda holding the nsfw parts would come faster only to realize their locked and I still had 10+ ch before then. I don’t think the quality of this work is good enough that I should be hoped for those scenes.
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