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TuChumi
TuChumiLv131yr
2023-12-28 22:30

Wasted potential.The first arc was a cliché but entertaining story by a clearly inexperienced, albeit promising up-and-coming author.It followed the tried and true trope of a reincarnator having to steal a son of luck protagonist's fate, with a fairly standard cast of characters (and yes, there are yanderes).The end of the first arc was where the story truly started to come into its own and showed flashes of brilliance, very successfullly expanding the world and upping the stakes, starting to build up a confrontation with the antagonist towards the end of the story. Unfortunately, this webnovel never managed to get there, suddenly entering a hiatus that lasted for months. By the time the novel came back, it rushed into a forced ending, disregarding all events in the story up to that point and breaking one of the most basic taboos in storytelling (it was all a dream...)Also worth noting that towards the end of the story the author remembered he was homophobic and decided to never forget again by reminding the reader every other chapter, spouting some of the most atrocious takes I've read, particularly in the sidestory

Stealing The Protagonist’s Yandere Lovers

Sheizzcoldasice
4.8
158 Chs

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eyeless_grimm
eyeless_grimmLv2

can you spoil the ending for me?

1yr
DaoistzEswsL
DaoistzEswsLLv12

man thank man saved me the rest of my weekend 😄

1yr
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DaoistzEswsL
DaoistzEswsLLv12

spoiler.......... I watched the ending it is just the fact that he got in a car accident on real life and on e of his girlfriend saved him cuz she loved him a lot see used classified information to create a ai to create a parallel reality where he did whatever he wanted so he still have the desire to life so his brain dead brain after the accident will fix himself YW

eyeless_grimm:can you spoil the ending for me?
1yr
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DaoistzEswsL
DaoistzEswsLLv12

Bruh so many grammatical mistakes 💀

DaoistzEswsL:spoiler.......... I watched the ending it is just the fact that he got in a car accident on real life and on e of his girlfriend saved him cuz she loved him a lot see used classified information to create a ai to create a parallel reality where he did whatever he wanted so he still have the desire to life so his brain dead brain after the accident will fix himself YW
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LuciferTheDevil767
LuciferTheDevil767Lv2

DaoistzEswsL:spoiler.......... I watched the ending it is just the fact that he got in a car accident on real life and on e of his girlfriend saved him cuz she loved him a lot see used classified information to create a ai to create a parallel reality where he did whatever he wanted so he still have the desire to life so his brain dead brain after the accident will fix himself YW
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DaoistzEswsL
DaoistzEswsLLv12

why do you say that tell me your opinion.

LuciferTheDevil767:
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Malcolm_Massey
Malcolm_MasseyLv14

so the whole story was just a dream and the end was rushed? then it's not worth reading.

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DaoistzEswsL
DaoistzEswsLLv12

lol ya

Malcolm_Massey:so the whole story was just a dream and the end was rushed? then it's not worth reading.
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DaoistzEswsL
DaoistzEswsLLv12

nvm I understand now

DaoistzEswsL:why do you say that tell me your opinion.
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GODOFCAT
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It's a good novel, it has short chapters but has a fast update rate, just tries it maybe you would like it, Jejdjajfjekdkeosofjeosofdoti

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Sheizzcoldasice
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Now that we won bronze in wpc harem contest, I again writing this comment. Well there may be some little grammatical errors here and there as I rarely proofread and edit. But, majority of it is a smooth read. Since its my first book that I am writing, I can only say the quality will keep getting better and better with future chapters😊😊

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naidxcr
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Amazing plot, characters are very well written and designed. I always love a story where the mc would steal some hot powerful guy. Very good story, definitely a 10/10.

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Normal_ROB
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I see the Necromancer Pettan in the in the cover. then this is 5 star for me........ ......................................................

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Topmmoplayr
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Great been waiting For novel like these ,where mc steals all op girls against hero. And aushima seems best girl to me….expecting more chs soon.

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This is an interesting story to read(since I've only read a few novels like this). The writing quality is good so far there is nothing to complain about and seems to be improving(how I see it) as the story progresses. For story development I won't lie it was a bit boring in the beginning. It did become interesting in the latter half of the story though but so far so good. The character design is good I like how the 2nd rate mcs of the novel don't follow the usual trope which was surprising and how all the characters developed whether true the 'eyes' being opened or by see how the 2nd rate mcs treats those around them a good twist. World building is like other novels with your higher and lower worlds but it isn't to big of a problem as I see it but others might think otherwise. I wouldn't know about the updating schedule since most chapters were out when I started reading but it doesn't seem to be an issue as I've seen so far.

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Biva
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The opening scene and MC thoughts are very interesting. Finally found a novel where the MC tries to rob and form a harem. Waiting for the adventure along with guild formation.

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