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2022-10-23 14:28

Story could have been a great adventure of a man who had to come to terms with his past life while dealing with a new world and yandare fml but it was instead weird perversion of the author who thought having the assassin be a CHILD for over 100 plus chapters was a good idea and then to charge that much money for it?? Really? It has so much potential but is ruined by him being a CHILD FOR 90% of the story! Why??? Who’s into this stuff?

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IamMountTai
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Short Critical Review Read 105 chapters and dropped unfortunately. It has some good ideas, but I would have to say I'm disappointed. The problem is I can't take it seriously. While I know its a story full of yanderes, so I expect craziness, but the realism behind things in the story not just with the heroines are very unsatisfactory. One of the main reasons behind it is because the MC is a child. One that is under the age of 10 mind you. I have no complaints with him being a child, but the way people around him react aren't realistic enough most of the time in response to his presence. The author does try to show the character development of the mc multiple times in comparison to show his change from the past. But I feel the execution is lacking from my expectations and things that should be seen much later in the novel are seen quite early within the 100 chapters. (SPOILER) For instance, there was a scene in the novel where he confronts his ugly self which was seen in a random test because goddess was like yeah lets mess with him here. Instead of maybe some hyped built up test and this was like the final test where he struggles deeply because its a reflection of his psyche but instead we something resolved quite quickly and the acceptance was done in like a chapter. It's pretentious and cheap. I cannot take it seriously sorry. SPOILER~ I stopped at 104 for a reason. With the previous chapter of the heroine who was LITERIALLY IN HER 30S hardcore smother kissed a kid under 10 years old! While its ridiculous and we can just blame things on the goddess even tho things weren't done in a convincing matter prior to this....THE MC DOES NOT QUESTION THE MORALITY BEHIND IT NOR WAS IT MENTIONED AT ALL BY THE AUTHOR. The only reception close to that was "...That's sexual harassment of a young boy." In the next chapter, he contemplates about the incident as the matter between man and woman. Cool that's fine since you were actually an adult before, but like... HELLO MORALITY?!!! This is the perfect example as to why I just can't take things seriously at all. Serious story or not it doesn't matter, but the realism is very unsatisfactory. As a result, I'm dropping it unfortunately. It's a shame because there are some good ideas like the whole mc being able to go to Dia. I also quite liked Tania and she at least out of the 3 heroines introduced was the most believable even though it was still ridiculous. Writing quality- It's fine for a web novel standard. There are mistakes but it doesn't distract me from my reading and completely legible.

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