Thank you so much for the review!I also noticed your comments as you read through the novel. Really made my day every time I saw them.And you're absolutely right about the quality of the writing dropping for a bit, which is why they will be edited in the near future. I was extremely busy during that point in time, but I still wanted to upload something every week.Im also happy to hear that my best work is the heavy chapters. Im was really proud of most of them, but I was never too sure about how well they turned out.You're also right about character interactions being a bit shallow at times (if not all the time) That's something ill be trying to fix when i edit, but character interaction might be my weak point when it comes too writing. I hope I can improve on the interactions in the future.I would appreciate some more feedback on other areas you think needs to be improved. Im hoping to make my Dark fantasy as enjoyable as possible. So, any criticism is welcomed.I think I mentioned it already in the Authors thoughts, but Im going to upload a Prologue next week on Wednesday (maybe earlier idk) After that is when ill be do my heavy editing and improving different scenes. So if there are any you really have notes on, I'll hear it.Have a Great day!

To be honest for your first novel you did really well, you can be proud of what is already there.It is hard for me to think of something specific, but what I can think of is that the changes in location could flow into another more, to feel the world being connected and also real travel taking place.Maybe noticing changes in scenery, people dressing different, accents, wild life, architecture, people behaviour special for the location, and similar stuff.It also does a ton for immersion, maybe also stuff having consequences. For example not letting the hero travel to Prosperty City unrelated to Ruby, but making it a consequence of her carelessness going after the guy who tried to intimidate them, maybe he is noticing her disguise but isnt sure but when he sees her on the way leaving the city he tells the hero and he getsthe direction they traveled from the guads and astgis is their only lead they take this direction.Also the thing with the dungeon, it feels a bit random that the hero enters the dungeon giving them a 2 week grace period. What about after their fight for the merchants against the dungeon monsters, they decide to convince one particularly scared merchand to send a request for aid and extrermination of the dangerous dungeon at "the side of the road".Maybe make it that they are closer to the city they came from so the messenger either meets the hero on the road or he hasnt departed yet and he has to act because of the merchant guilds influence or something.Just an idea but stuff like that to make things more organic and at the same time further establishing world building.Also this is only my unschooled opinion but since you asked I tried to provide something useful. I hope it helps in any way, have a nice weekend :)