First thing first, i only read up till' the 35 chapter. So, i can't say much. Every thing is great and has a lot of potential (it is too fast-paced for me though). Two things that irked me the most are the forced comedy and Jezzebeth's death. The forced comedy you can read it for yourself and see, it's not that bad though. The author don't give Jezze much screen time, and that sucks. When she died, we get some flashbacks of her time with the Mc. Like, if the author spend more time with her. Fleshing her out, giving her more life. The death would've been more impactful for us readers. The quality of the story would've been up a notch. I just hate characters with good potential get snuffed too early without shining.
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LIKE*shining.
The MC'S bad luck also becomes painful, though it's should be slapstick and amusing it just got depressing. I'm sure it's intended to be extremely funny misfortunes but I took it way too seriously, anything bad that could happen to him did. His benefits didn't make the pain worth it for me.
