Writing quality could use some improvement and editing, switching pov so suddenly makes it so annoying, and the story flow is kinda boring with the constant mention of useless things makes me want to drop it the moment I read the first chapter, it's a long chapter yet it nothing happens, to be honest, world background is ok. It's an ok read overall Maybe use Grammarly or watch a YT video about how to make the flow of the story better and the pov change better.
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