Review Detail of Jolan_Hildebrandt in Ash Earth Awakening
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Why did you put all that exposition at the start only to have us learn about the academy and the monsters from the other chapters? Too much exposition in the first chapter may discourage people from reading a perfectly good story. Have faith in your characters and the plot.
Ash Earth Awakening
ColiJiyo
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You know what? I whole-heartedly agree with what you and a few other readers commented. It was a wall of exposition and it have been bothering me for a while. But I've reworked it now and am quite happy with it. It's still a setup but it's something more like a movie intro, at least in my imagination. I hope you'll enjoy it as much as I do.