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chery_cabral
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2022-06-07 17:13

Thank you for reviewing mine. So, here is my review to your story. Story wise, good writing but a short prologue and a shorter synopsis might add an interesting kick to your story. Please do take note that all of your possible future readers might be familiar with your chosen genre so do include a glossary if needed. Thank you.

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Edit: *unfamiliar

ColiJiyo
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Thanks for the review! I really appreciate your constructive feedback. I've made some changes to the synopsis (mainly shortening it and splitting it to form a prologue.) I'll try to include maybe a glossary in the future.

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