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Shad
ShadLv62yr
2022-08-05 11:32

The story idea is great but the flow of the story is a mess especially when nearing chapter 40 it just jumps to a story without coherance just making it confusing and lots of details is missing and the idea of changing templates instead of combining them and have an OP MCis just mess up whats the point of having 2 of them and cant use the skills from the other template.

Alternate World: I Started With Two SSS Templates

Cold Fried Anchovies
2.3
636 Chs

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MightyEagle
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I don’t know if this is just me, but I have trouble reading the novel. I find myself having to re-read sentences or paragraphs. The flow reading is messed up and the transitions between paragraphs are rough.

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GifflarGod
GifflarGodLv14

1. there is no world building no idea what kind of world it is, planet? plane? what are the countries? how their world got the dungeons and wild monsters. 2. No idea how they got their powers originally. How the level system works. if it is just gaining power and leveling like in a game it's stupid 3. there are no strength, agility, stamina stats.. which means basically mc has infinite stamina which is ridiculous 4 just the idea that they have game like skills and level up by killing without anything like energy gathering or physical training or skill training is stupid. too much is so wrong.. this is like a story in a game. like imagine you play a game in ps5 and this story is the story of the game

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Rhongomynaid
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Dropped at CH 1, this novel is incoherent rubbish. I don't know if the source material is any good or not but what I do know is that this translation is atrociously bad. I'm noticing a trend with Webnovel, they've started putting out more and more literally unreadable novels and as a reader this blatant disrespect really feels like a slap on the face. I cannot make sense of this below MTL level translation. 0/5

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Dark_Eterium
Dark_EteriumLv3

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MoreMercury76
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uflesh940
uflesh940Lv3

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