Overall this is good story. Need improvement like Writing Qualities so reader can easy to read. And need more word to write for a single chapter, but don't do it if its burdened author. And don't give up to write a story until finish. Many fanfic author lose their idea because the Their MC is too Overpower or too many outsmarting their MC enemies. And in this fanfic/novel, until this chapter, MC have many space for Character development, he can be evil/good/regreting his past/satisfied with his revenge.
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