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Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117Lv12yr
2022-11-09 19:43

Amazing story, especially the first chapter. I'd honestly rate the first chapter 5 stars, even with it not being perfect. The description is good when it's used but I feel it could be used a bit more. When I used to write, I would put quotes from the same characters in the same paragraph. But now I usually space them out into different sentences. That isn't only done with plays, if you look at some novels you will see that many authors do this. I recommend you give this a try. it makes the story a slightly easier read. Perhaps it's a stylistic preference. I'd like to know a bit more about what this universe is and what the setting is. I've started reading this story enjoying it but also feeling a bit lost. With that being said, I welcome you to take a peak at my stories "Avatar: Macai's Journey or Avatar: Lingering Tensions" if you have time.

CPU

RogerKaos
4.6
13 Chs

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RogerKaos
RogerKaosAuthor

Thanks Brian! I actually have this paragraph problem fixed by the next Volume 2 of Synthwave and the rest of my work! I don't know if I can help you a lot since I am not a huge expert on Avatar.

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kerryn
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I like the story as every action is well-detailed. The chapters also move along pretty well. Those who love action should give CPU a chance. Nice story.

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KayLillyt_1
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A nice read with a steady pace and a lot of characters to follow up with. From superheroes to witches, action to drama that are all well detailed. The writing style is also impressive. It’s great read… a must read!

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ZeroX0666
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Great read, what can i say, it's an interesting story with an interesting premise. I look forward to reading more of it.

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Walt_Hitchcock
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A very interesting take on the superhero genre that’s not really explored in modern comics from giants such as DC or Marvel. Those who are looking for something different from classic super stories should definitely give this a read.

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Rin_Nurnia
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Bored and not sleepy. I literally can relate myself with MC. But man..so many things happened in the first chapter, however it's really nice to read this kind of genre since it's kinda my first time for me🤭

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_Rockbison_
_Rockbison_Lv3

Nice and unique story l must say... But l liked the author's writting skill more... I've never seen a super hero team type of story in this app before.... I can tell by reading till now that there going to be a very cool scenc as it is a one kind of power renger type of theme...... That's what l feel... Keep going author... My best wishes is with u...

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Juliet_Omuadona
Juliet_OmuadonaLv4

The story is interesting, and the pace is just great. The characters are well developed. Those who love a little action should read this book. The author's conversation style might make it difficult for readers to follow at some point, but definitely worth the read.

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abyssallock
abyssallockLv1

Ok, the introduction was interesting along with the subsequent detailed explanation as well. But it would be nice for the readers if you seperate the dialogue for each character seperately in different paragraph, not jumbling up the dialogues for manay characters at once. Otherwise it is a really good story with huge potential. Good work.

2yr
Sneakycat098
Sneakycat098Lv2

The tags given definitely suits the plot of this novel. There's mysterious dark vibes and an excellent MC which stands at the centre of this novel world. However, since I am not really into these stuffs I couldn't relate it very well, however for those who like action fantasy, this one might be a good choice for you to read. Apart from that, I believe a slight change in way of expression might help in improving the flow of reading even better.

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