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Jolan_HildebrandtLv12yrJolan_Hildebrandt

Now I gave character design a low rating because you didn't focus on Shi. Why not use Shi to explain why the village isn't prosperous maybe she remembers an incident when the clans withdrew their support and the town slowly slid into despair. Stop telling me and show me through Shi's eyes not yours

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The story is mainly focused on 3rd person point of views. But I will keep the feedback in mind for future uses!

Jolan_Hildebrandt
Jolan_HildebrandtLv1Jolan_Hildebrandt

you can still do all that in third person