Review Detail of GoldBySilver in Messing With The Anime Multiverse

Well, what can i say. They’re crazy🌝

is it just harem from the male side? or including reverse harem? so the girlfriend have many bf too?

She’s crazy. But loyal af. No reverse harem bruh💀

Bruhh what are you talking about

Wait, so the boy is not loyal?

He is. They’re at a level where one would commit suicide if the other is dead or if reviving the other is impossible.

And that, my friend, is what is dragging this story down. You clearly have the necessary talent to write a good story but you want to be 'cool' by making your MCs evil or some BS that now became 'modern' on this site. The problem is, you have no idea what makes a good villain so you just make your characters evil for the sake of being evil and it makes everything so shallow... Well, there will definitely be an audience that will like it anyway, if only because there is a serious drought of content currently, so whatever. I am sorry for being a bit harsh and it is your story so write what you want but I just think it is a pity and a waste of talent.

It’s not harsh but i know its true. This story is more like me trying to know what i am best at. I’ll write an original with the best of my ability that’ll show the charatcter’s development as much as possible.

Since you say it is a learning experience for you, if you want, I can elaborate on why and how exactly their personality is dragging the quality of your story down. It has less to do with the craziness of your characters themselves and more to do with how it affects your story and writing. But if you are not interested, I will not waste my time typing it all down only for it to be disregarded :D. So, just give me your honest opinion.

Tell me. I’m writing a novel about an ordinary guy ’becoming’ a villain in another world. it’ll be about how the world changed him in a long run. There are a dozen or so chapters in my notes.

interesante, cuentame mas....

Bruh i am still waiting for that answer just in case you forgot🥲

I wrote my answer over 3 comments three days ago. They are in this review. Did you perhaps miss them or is there something wrong with the site and you can't see them?

There’s only my comment after the one done by aldo guy in a different language. Maybe the system removed it. It’ll show you like it’s normal but others can’t see it. And i was waiting for a few days like maybe he’s offline😂

Wait. I can see them by going into your profile. Lemme check them out

Just realised that you’re the author of reborn with talent💀 Hope you don’t mind me taking that tsunade part🗿

I see. I kinda slacked(basically ignored) on the emotions part. I’ll be careful about that now.

I see. Well, thanks about the information, means a lot ngl.

As for the 'Tsunade part', do whatever you want. It is not like I could forbid you from doing anything in your story since these are fanfictions. I don't really mind it anyway. Well, good luck with your next story, and most importantly, have fun with it. The best advice I can give you is to write what you want to write. If you have a favorite female character or a favorite franchise, go for it without caring about the opinion of your readers. These things are for you to keep you interested in continuing your story. Whether it is bad or good, if you stick with writing, you will eventually improve. A good way to realize some of your mistakes is by reading comments, especially the negative ones. It might be a bit hard to ignore a dude who is swearing at you but usually, angry people are honest ones. It is them who will either bluntly point out the problem they have with your story (and some of them can be pure BS because people are that bored so you gotta decide what you take into consideration) or just fire a massive amount of expletives at you. In the latter case, just ignore them. I learned what I know mostly from my mistakes and I still do more of them on regular basis. That's just a part of writing. The important part is to just admit to yourself that perfection doesn't exist and self-improvement is a never-ending path.

And btw, yeah, there is some kind of weird bug where comments are not posted under this review for some reason. Or rather, I can see my last post only when I go to my profile too. Eh, whatever.