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Chummy
ChummyLv132yr
2022-06-30 23:19

the novel and writing is good but for safety measures of my heart i stop reading and wanted ask, there's NTR? (Sorry For My Bad English) ╮(^▽^)╭

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MacleMore
MacleMoreLv5

No there isn't any Ntr, so its safe.

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Johnathon_Magus
Johnathon_MagusLv3

First off the grammer is excellent in this novel. The update stability was good when releasing or at least I seen from other review’s. Charcter design not bad at all good description’s. The Backgroud of the lore for Elden Ring is superbly done. Now for the story which for me had it’s up’s and down’s overall. I’ll get the negative’s out of the way the women of the novel make conparison’s with their former spouses with the MC. Even one’s pressence being hinted to be affecting one of the harem girl’s. Giving those Cuck me vibes for the MC. He doesn’t save every girl in Elden Ring. Well those that are mentioned but never show up or do but die. Also some yuri vibes yeah take that what you will. Even personally wasn’t a fan every stinking time I’m thinking author really? At least have the MC present but no it’s at the end but two women go off and do their own thing. Hard Cuck vibes once again. If your expecting any tension in the story the MC is OP so enough said. His charcter can be a bit one dimensional being the silent MC. He’s not whiney like other MC’s so that’s a plus. His charcterization come’s from’s his expression’s which is either smile, shake’s head, and stare lol. The method’s he use’s to save the girl’s seem’s legit some at the same time I’m not so sure. The thing that really bugged me was the wedding and the dividing the women based off status. Not having them married all at once really ticked me off. Given it was a clear divide on who the MC was showing favoritism toward’s at least in my view. I felt each girl could have been fleshed out more and had more interaction’s with the MC. It felt rushed at times the romance and contrived. With some girl’s falling in love way too soon for my taste. Overall these my raw and honest thought’s on the novel. The postive is the aformentioned grammer,worldbuilding,and charcter design. Hope this helped anyone peace.

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