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Jair206902
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2024-02-07 21:07

Well, before reading this story I had very high expectations because it is very rare to find stories about Mushoku Tensei and adding the ability that you gave it makes it even more interesting, but... I ended up disappointed. Let's start first with that information glossary at the beginning, you can't start a story and the first thing to do is to load the readers with information, you could have approached all of this in a different way. Then in another chapter you address the entire life of the Mc, which I am not saying is bad, I have always liked to meet the protagonist before he begins his adventure, but coming from that first chapter I see everything as very bland and insipid. Another thing that could be highlighted about this story is that the writing is not written as such, it is rather a test script before writing the story, which already lowers many points, which would be acceptable for people who are just starting to write. write, but you are not the case, since I have seen that before this story he has already written many more. Another thing I can notice is that at times the story does not seem to advance, paragraphs are simply repeated, they are just with different words, even most of the paragraphs are showing the great list of Mc's abilities. To finish I will just say to wait longer, I even gave him 2 extra chances after deciding to leave him with the thought that he might get better, but no. I couldn't take it anymore and decided to quit permanently.

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Akros_Zero
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I would have liked to explain what really happened, but since you left I won't just a reminder see the release dates of chapter.

MARLENE_ANGEL
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well say guy ..you say it best...i am also out..because this author's stories are always the same NO substance at all Just empty BORING novels..THE AUTHOR HAS NO IDEA HOW TO USE RIMURU SKILLS..,, I will never read this author's novels they are a waste of time. ARE THIS AUTHOR'S NOVEL WRITTEN BY DUMB CHILDREN OR ADULTS

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