Review Detail of ryfulrifle in The Blood Hound Of House Grey
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C8 Hooked, per say. It's a very... beautiful piece so far. I love the author's writing style — clear and succinct, detailed yet not. They construct the scenes super well from the little subtitles in the setting to the emotions of the characters. Sebastian, just from his dialogue and interactions, is already very fleshed out. Loving the world he's in. Apart from that and me being picky: there are a few extra long sentences at times, as well as mis-spaced paragraphs that get a tad annoying to follow. It's a great start and very promising.
The Blood Hound Of House Grey
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nono! its just me being picky on my preferences. though I'm not sure what about your previous edit, I much prefer "blocks" of text. It helps me immerse and get in the flow better. for some paragraphs tho, (subjectively) its too abrupt and takes away from the scene, like an awkward or delayed cut in a film. But I don't even think there's even a set guidelines on paragraph spacing; nothing to quit over especially when you're doing so well!
Littleplotter:I was told to cut the paragraphs short. I did. They dais shorter... I did. Now it's misplaced? Should I just quit writing? I mean I'm only a few days old so it's okay right?image
