Item: NLG
Rating: 4
Author: Jolan_Hildebrandt

Jolan_HildebrandtLv12yr

2022-05-24 11:29

Okay, what you have is an excellent premise. What you need to do is slow it down. what you need to do is offer some suspense. Hook the reader in. You had the right idea at the start, but you didn't build up the reveal. Name the genie. help me connect with him better, how does he feel about his life? Give the genie internal conflict, and I promise you the story will shine.

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