This story had potential. But u basically limited yourself. The wishes while it had rules and being 5 the Mc got more than 5 wishes. The Mc have no sort of background what r is goals and belief. What drives him aside for want to live. The system given to the Mc handicap his growth in that he don't hv to try anything he's simply given what ever information he wants. Which to me is pretty boring most ppl read a fan fic to see an Mc grow, there is no room to grow when u can ask your system any question that couldve been learn by himself which could've been used to grow the character. You claim to no not want to nerf your Mc yet in the tournament arc he had to limit his powers. Why because he didn't wanna kill anyone. You could had only be at that strength for sum reason and had his opponents actually give him a proper challenge which would've fuel his growth rather than him walking though the entire thing learning nothing. The choice to fix his wishes rather than him finding a solution himself is rather lazy writing cuz all of those powers I bet there are ways to fix himself in the universe rather than ask god to help. Most of the time u spent creating this love story when simpley most of these girls attracted to him is because of his power rather thann his personality or not superficial reason. Could've been spent where Mc learning science or something interesting ( he's in krypton for godsake a freaking alien planet) rather than telling us he did it. Personally I'm not a fan of a harem when it's not the norm of the present society or has no purpose to the story other fan service. These are just some of the issues with your story to which I think limits it form being a really good fan fic.
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LIKEI don’t know where you got the idea of the system basically giving him all the answers he wants but your nothing short of wrong. The system gives suggestions to the MC when he needs it, not answers and the system clearly doesn’t know everything otherwise MC wouldn’t have gone to God for help and would have simply asked the system for a solution to his problem. And you saying the MC doesn’t have a background shows that you clearly didn’t read the BIO chapter otherwise you wouldnt say stuff like MC not having a background. I gave a background to the MC in the bio chapter and Although it’s not much, it’s at least something. I also went into little detail on his background in one of the chapters and that’s what I plan to do, give some details about him till everything is eventually known about him. And who says the MC doesn’t have a goal?? His goal is to reach tier 1A, did I not make that clear? Or did you decide to just ignore it and make up some excuse? I Don’t know about you but if you don’t like Overpowered MC’s then you shouldn’t even be in this fanfic. I clearly put an overpowered tag on the story and if you came here expecting a MC who struggles and gets beat up on his quest to power then you clearly came to the wrong fanfic. You basically just ignored all tags on the story and immediately dived in and was something happened that you didn’t, you immediately proceeded to give a bad review. As for the harem, if you don’t like it then leave. There’s a reason a harem tag was there too.
And as for you saying that I nerfed the MC, how is restricting your power temporarily called nerfing?? Mc didnt restrict his power so that he wouldn’t kill his opponents, he already has enough control to not kill them, he restricted his power so that his abnormal strength and speed isn’t found out. If that’s nerfing for you then you might as well look up the word ‘nerf’ cause you clearly don’t know what it means. P.S if you haven’t figured it out, the other person who responded to you was me using my Alternate account. I thought I was responding with this one but it seems I was wrong. You got the entire story wrong and I’m really considering if I should delete your review since it’s completely wrong and based off on your misunderstandings but I’ll see later on.
The_Essence_:I don’t know where you got the idea of the system basically giving him all the answers he wants but your nothing short of wrong. The system gives suggestions to the MC when he needs it, not answers and the system clearly doesn’t know everything otherwise MC wouldn’t have gone to God for help and would have simply asked the system for a solution to his problem. And you saying the MC doesn’t have a background shows that you clearly didn’t read the BIO chapter otherwise you wouldnt say stuff like MC not having a background. I gave a background to the MC in the bio chapter and Although it’s not much, it’s at least something. I also went into little detail on his background in one of the chapters and that’s what I plan to do, give some details about him till everything is eventually known about him. And who says the MC doesn’t have a goal?? His goal is to reach tier 1A, did I not make that clear? Or did you decide to just ignore it and make up some excuse? I Don’t know about you but if you don’t like Overpowered MC’s then you shouldn’t even be in this fanfic. I clearly put an overpowered tag on the story and if you came here expecting a MC who struggles and gets beat up on his quest to power then you clearly came to the wrong fanfic. You basically just ignored all tags on the story and immediately dived in and was something happened that you didn’t, you immediately proceeded to give a bad review. As for the harem, if you don’t like it then leave. There’s a reason a harem tag was there too.
First suggestion is defined as a plan or idea.....just one example of the system giving him an answer mine u it's not needed. In chapter 4 the whole explanation of him being Zod's son is not a need thing but a want of his. he could've figured it out but nope system basically answered it for him. Also the strength comparison between him and a normal baby also the system tells him the answer to the power gauging question. Rather than him figuring it out. could've basically fought them to guage their strength but no here the system give him another answer which was not needed but something he wanted. and in the later chapter the system transform into something different and it will become more a crutch for him going on. As for the background aspects, I did miss the bio part of the story started in chapter 1 for me. Really lol his goal is to meet ter 1. he brushed over that so easily but ok. i never said i dont want Op u said u dont want to nerf the character mind u to nerf something is to make it weak. which you did to the Mc. Nothing is wrong with op all I'm saying is that the whole arc isn't necessary if he had to restrict his powers and still walk through them. What's the point. he could still fight his oppent being overpower but still lacking in something. i wanted to see growth. you could've deleted the who tournament arc and the readers wouldn't have missed anything in his growth. i dont wanna see him get beat i wanna see him grow to learn something new from these kids or be surprised at their skills or at least hv him underestimate his opponents to see he int the only strong 1 there...all of this could hv be done without having them seem unnecessary we already know he's op. the Acr was boring. your harem is unnecessary...where in Dc does any do it ...where in his bio said he's into multiple women stw. If you want to do it at least make it make sense. its your novel feel free to delete it unless people share the same views.
The_Essence_:I don’t know where you got the idea of the system basically giving him all the answers he wants but your nothing short of wrong. The system gives suggestions to the MC when he needs it, not answers and the system clearly doesn’t know everything otherwise MC wouldn’t have gone to God for help and would have simply asked the system for a solution to his problem. And you saying the MC doesn’t have a background shows that you clearly didn’t read the BIO chapter otherwise you wouldnt say stuff like MC not having a background. I gave a background to the MC in the bio chapter and Although it’s not much, it’s at least something. I also went into little detail on his background in one of the chapters and that’s what I plan to do, give some details about him till everything is eventually known about him. And who says the MC doesn’t have a goal?? His goal is to reach tier 1A, did I not make that clear? Or did you decide to just ignore it and make up some excuse? I Don’t know about you but if you don’t like Overpowered MC’s then you shouldn’t even be in this fanfic. I clearly put an overpowered tag on the story and if you came here expecting a MC who struggles and gets beat up on his quest to power then you clearly came to the wrong fanfic. You basically just ignored all tags on the story and immediately dived in and was something happened that you didn’t, you immediately proceeded to give a bad review. As for the harem, if you don’t like it then leave. There’s a reason a harem tag was there too.
it's not nerf of mc would restrict his power to "non killing " also if you don't like h#rêm cause it's not realistic in "modern society* or whatever...first of all its a different planet ,second you know in dc zatanna had relationship with Constantine and Nick necro at the same time? it was a three way relationship actually .. Black Adam had many wives, though not explicitly stated but batman relationships with many women at the same time ... not serious ones but yes Oliver queen was a Playboy until he settled on canary ,star fire in new 52 had relationship with many men at the same time if you search ,you could find even more bizzare relationship in dc not to mention there is Greek pantheon here too also ,if you don't like h$rêm then why you here ? there are many single pair or no h$rém fanfics on this website so why waste your time ? check the tags and move on? lastly yes polygamy is not wide spread and mostly frowned upon in modern society but it does exist you know in some States of America it's legal ? you know in America thers are legit polygamist communities and societies like Mormons ? its also allowed in religions like Islam ? do you know it's a norm in Arab countries ? and some other countries too? do you know even powerful politicians and businessmen have mistresses with the knowledge of their wife? it's not a thing for normal people or middle class/working class like us cause first of all we can't afford it , then it's hard work to even maintain one relationship you can not have another without frying your brains and women won't agree to be in one ... but unlike you most people know what it's is a h#rêm fanfic and most people read these kind of story for escapism from daily grind , and power fantasy that's it it's not that deep
author can you delete the 2 star comments they are both pointless and are just dragging down your star review?
Grand_White10:And as for you saying that I nerfed the MC, how is restricting your power temporarily called nerfing?? Mc didnt restrict his power so that he wouldn’t kill his opponents, he already has enough control to not kill them, he restricted his power so that his abnormal strength and speed isn’t found out. If that’s nerfing for you then you might as well look up the word ‘nerf’ cause you clearly don’t know what it means. P.S if you haven’t figured it out, the other person who responded to you was me using my Alternate account. I thought I was responding with this one but it seems I was wrong. You got the entire story wrong and I’m really considering if I should delete your review since it’s completely wrong and based off on your misunderstandings but I’ll see later on.
Things like that are the reason people type trash or don't read this story. I typed all the things that I found to be the issue with your story. Mind you multiple people agreed with my statement. you simply want to create the illusion your story is flawless when it is not. I'm thinking u simply delete low reviews just to get a high rating
Grand_White10:I was considering it. Aight, I’ll do it.
Create the illusion that my story is flawless?? I am aiming for a flawless story but never once did I think or try to create the illusion that my story is flawless. There’s a reason why I said people should put constructive criticism on my sypnosis. It’s because I know my story isn’t flawless and could use some improvements. As for you saying that I delete reviews all so I can give myself a high review, mind you I only deleted one review that was completely just hating on my story with no sense of constructive criticism in it. Hence why I deleted it, and it’s the only one I’ve deleted. In total, there are only two reviews that are bad in my story, yours included. I deleted the other one simply because it was bad and had no advice in it, leaving your review as the only bad one in this story simply because it wasn’t hating and had some constructive criticism in it. If you think I deleted reviews to increase my rating then that’s your opinion, your problem. Think all you want for all I care, not my problem. Keep the illusion that I did despite my words, it’s your mind, your thoughts. Your delusion. That’s all. P.S: I haven’t deleted your review simply because it has constructive criticism. Keep telling yourself I delete all bad reviews.
ThePandaCritic:Things like that are the reason people type trash or don't read this story. I typed all the things that I found to be the issue with your story. Mind you multiple people agreed with my statement. you simply want to create the illusion your story is flawless when it is not. I'm thinking u simply delete low reviews just to get a high ratingimage
and for me the place that completely kill this fic is the fact mc can simple ask god to edit a weakness of his wish anytime he want. so next time he see another weakness or limit of his wish he will simple ask god again, author should simple not put the ability to talk to god in the first place. to all the truth it dont even making sense he be able to talk to god like that. it completely kill my mood to the fic
It killed your mood then bye bye, sorry it’s not perfect for you. And MC going to God for every single problem or weakness he has is your own delusion and thoughts. It was never mentioned that he would go to God for every single problem, he only went to God because he believed that there was no way to get rid of weakness. If he could then he wouldn’t have even contacted God in the first place. It’s not my problem anyway. You can leave and go to another story, with your thinking, it’s good for the both of us.
Kenrio:and for me the place that completely kill this fic is the fact mc can simple ask god to edit a weakness of his wish anytime he want. so next time he see another weakness or limit of his wish he will simple ask god again, author should simple not put the ability to talk to god in the first place. to all the truth it dont even making sense he be able to talk to god like that. it completely kill my mood to the fic