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2022-06-03 07:10

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ThePandaCritic
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This story had potential. But u basically limited yourself. The wishes while it had rules and being 5 the Mc got more than 5 wishes. The Mc have no sort of background what r is goals and belief. What drives him aside for want to live. The system given to the Mc handicap his growth in that he don't hv to try anything he's simply given what ever information he wants. Which to me is pretty boring most ppl read a fan fic to see an Mc grow, there is no room to grow when u can ask your system any question that couldve been learn by himself which could've been used to grow the character. You claim to no not want to nerf your Mc yet in the tournament arc he had to limit his powers. Why because he didn't wanna kill anyone. You could had only be at that strength for sum reason and had his opponents actually give him a proper challenge which would've fuel his growth rather than him walking though the entire thing learning nothing. The choice to fix his wishes rather than him finding a solution himself is rather lazy writing cuz all of those powers I bet there are ways to fix himself in the universe rather than ask god to help. Most of the time u spent creating this love story when simpley most of these girls attracted to him is because of his power rather thann his personality or not superficial reason. Could've been spent where Mc learning science or something interesting ( he's in krypton for godsake a freaking alien planet) rather than telling us he did it. Personally I'm not a fan of a harem when it's not the norm of the present society or has no purpose to the story other fan service. These are just some of the issues with your story to which I think limits it form being a really good fan fic.

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