Review Detail of TonyT in Masquerade of Madness
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The story seemed interesting at the beginning with the MC near psychosis and his horrible grief but the story is takes a sharp turn to the supernatural which I love. However, the story does have a few hiccups with story beats and grammar but they can be easily improved. Other than that, good story!
Masquerade of Madness
ThePotatoKing
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Sure, no problem! Ok, I'll give you an example in the first chapter when they are in the party. Instead of giving a paragraph for each character to describe how they are, make their personalities known without really saying how they are. What I mean is give them interactions in the party instead of downright explaining their character. Usually when you explain a character's personalities it dampers the story from progressing.
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