Hey, dropping this here as constructive criticism, the story has a really exciting and refreshing system, even though Mc is not the typical Mc he is smart .... or so I would like to think if we new anything about the characters other than cultivation levels, I'm not complaining because it is still interesting. but without any character development and knowledge it was like reading a list of events. one other thing is that the chapters were short and I read everything very quickly, a lot of this will come with time and experience and reading and trying things out, I'm not an author so I do not know the struggle. I would advise as the reader to put more feeling into the characters and the world your trying to build,and if you can do that it will all come together nicely. hope this helps. I will keep reading because it is a new story and I hope it ages like fine wine.
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Ok thank you for your feedback I am gonna try to add a little bit more about the characters and their personalities soon đź‘Ť
