Hello, Author here, This is my second time writing a novel. I hope you like it. I know that there are a lot of improvements that I can make so I would appreciate it if you could write down what I can do to improve the story and give suggestions for the story.

I have read till the latest chapter that is chapter 33 and I'd say that this novel is realy good,as well as the concept but the chapters are way too small and the author only uploads 2-3 chapters/week but if you have the patience to wait for the chapters then just read it, as you'll get addicted to the book... ,hope this helps u[img=recommend]

Update the " Upgrade system" novel dude we love that more than this novel ................................................................

I really like this novel a lot though the chapters are short which I would like the author to make the chapters longer pls. The MC power is what I like the most. As of right now the author has made a intelligent smart MC which many other author try to do but fail. Hopefully MC stays smart but otherwise I like the thought the MC cares for his sister while most novels MC don't care or just don't mention family any more.

Hey, dropping this here as constructive criticism, the story has a really exciting and refreshing system, even though Mc is not the typical Mc he is smart .... or so I would like to think if we new anything about the characters other than cultivation levels, I'm not complaining because it is still interesting. but without any character development and knowledge it was like reading a list of events. one other thing is that the chapters were short and I read everything very quickly, a lot of this will come with time and experience and reading and trying things out, I'm not an author so I do not know the struggle. I would advise as the reader to put more feeling into the characters and the world your trying to build,and if you can do that it will all come together nicely. hope this helps. I will keep reading because it is a new story and I hope it ages like fine wine.

Hey Author! You said you were looking for feedback so I figured I'd give my 2 cents. This is all in good faith. The writing quality of this novel is not great. It reads very much like a shopping list of events rather than a story, which minimizes any emotions we're supposed to feel. The main thing that could be improved is how fast-paced everything is. For example, there's nothing being shown about the sister leaving her brother for the very first time to go to a sect. surely that'd be an emotional moment All that being said, however, I think you've got something special. Webnovel readers can often see past writing imperfections but when it comes to power systems or cheats, we're a very logical bunch. We want a cheat to be used effectively, we want our power systems consistent, and most importantly we want our cheats FUN. This is your best point, the system is very fun to read about which makes all the writing imperfections not really matter. I don't care if I don't have any attachments to the characters if the cheat is fun. Him creating these "clones" for lack of a better word and using them is super entertaining to read about. Writing skills can be improved with practice but coming up with a fun world/power system/cheat is something that a LOT of authors mess up and at least from this novel you've got that down pat.

mas por favor autor los capitulos son cortos pero muy bueno, novela recomendada [img=update][img=update][img=actualizar][img=actualizar][img=actualizar][img=actualizar][img=actualizar][img=recomendar][img=actualizar][img=actualizar]