Review Swap:- Book Title: The Last Light’s War: Fall of the Righteous Rating: 3.8 / 5 Chapters: 21/21 Plot [Decent] Nothing to nit-pick so far, it’s just… the flashbacks are more interesting that the present. I am a fan of Norse Mythology, so you got me hooked as far as that’s concerned. Story flow [Convoluted] Needs a lot of improvement as the story is really hard to follow at times. It was really hard at the start but it got better in the middle and then it was on and off here and there. The thing I have complaints about is that the story seems to jump around here and there a lot. There are sudden info dumps here and there, sometimes you appreciate and like it, other times it interferes with the flow. The flashbacks are nice but end up overshadowing the present at times. The monologues by Freya can be hit or miss. At sometimes I liked them as it gives the story a nice flavour, at other points I just found it annoying and wanted her to shut up and let me get on with the story. One problem is that the font is really small and squiggly which makes it hard to read. Changing to a more readable font might work, not sure though. Favourite Chapter: 17 (or 18) I am talking about the proposal scene. This scene had a lot of nice emotions. It was a good finisher to the romance arc. Favourite Character: El (Was there even another option?) She is hands down the character with the most personality. While the rest are there, they don’t stand out as much as her. 3 things I liked Norse Mythology go brrr. Ok seriously I really liked the world building done by the author so far. The attention to detail here and there, the unique insults and other stuff makes it seem like a living breathing world. The characters are amazing. Each character is beautifully made by the author. Their interactions are fun to watch (except those weird dialogues of ch1) and the amazing backstories that they all have. The dynamic with the present versions, their heartfelt emotions are all put to display via this and its nice in itself. The political dynamics: the author does a pretty good job of describing the tension between humans and Asgardian, through the interactions between the two you slowly build up a view of the world and what’s it like. The author has real skill in this area. Though at times he makes use of cliches to achieve this. 3 Things I didn't like: Chapter 1 is hands down dragging down the rest of the story, the quality is mostly consistent over most chapters, however. The reason why I disliked chapter 1 the most is that at that point of time I don’t know anything about the characters, I have zero interest about anything and as a reader am just going in blind to see what happens. It’s the first chapter, I don’t care if the beast has 3 stars or D grade, I want to know what’s going on. I want to know who I am supposed to root for. I want to know what the major themes are. I want to get sucked in by the story. I do not want to expend effort to understand what I am reading. While other chapters have info dumps as well, by that time you care about the characters and are actually interested in the contents of the dump. Some of the spells at the start of the story were too long. Spells should not be more than a sentence at best. While stuff like this adds a sense of authenticity to your story and makes it look better, they are not supposed to be your main focus. The flashbacks were so interesting I just want to read a story of the shattering instead. Ok jk, it wasn’t that bad. The interesting backstories of each character are pretty good, but they are too early. While that works in making you care about the characters, it makes the present seem lackluster. Actual review: Fall of the Righteous is an epic story of an elite team with a unique set of characters with dazzling backstories set in a post-apocalyptic semi-dystopian world within the realm of Norse mythology. The story has all the elements and details that it needs to become awesome, unfortunately the author wraps them up in bare minimum of plot and chucks them into your face right at the start. Elements that shine individually are all mashed together in a small space which just leads to overcrowding and breaks up the flow of the story. I will just conclude by saying that I Love this book a lot. It has a lot of potential and while I as a reviewer can push past the rocky start and make it to the good stuff, most readers might not be able to do the same. Best of luck author. I believe in you. As long as you just touch up the story a little it will be an instant hit!
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