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WorthyAdversaryLv12yr
2022-06-28 23:44

A great novel! I'm really impressed author. So, first is the writing quality. Honestly, it's a lot better than a lot of novels on this platform, but it's not the best either. There are typos here and there, but they don't detract from the flow of the story. My only advice would be to either proofread your work before publishing it or have a friend proofread it. Second is the stability of updates, which, from the author's explanation is because of finals. Of course, I understand this, because I was faced with the same problem, but still, not posting for 28 days makes it so that your novel is pushed far down in Webnovel's algorithm. I honestly recommend you republish your novel. I did the same thing with my novel, which had 150k views and 700 collections after exams were over because Alekzi told met to. Now, a 2 days after the re-upload, I've finally broken the 1000 barrier in the ps rank of the novel, and my views are already at 20k after 2 days. Honestly, I recommend you do the same thing. Onto story development, which I think is the best part of this novel. The story development is actually really good, with minor plot points here and there building up the main plotline. The pace is neither too fast or two slow, and it kept me engaged. I think this is high praise coming from me as I rarely read a FMC novel, because I just can't connect, but somehow, the pace of this novel kept me on the entire time. I don't know why really... Next is character design. Honestly, I don't like the ML that much. Whilst the FL is incredibly unique, with her cunning mind and hazy background, the ML is just the generic brooding alpha male that you will see in any romance novel. I am honestly disappointed in the ML and I just wished that you would have made him more unique. Some lost potential here that you could fix in a re-upload. Finally, there's the world background. Again, it's very generic right now, with no uniqueness to make it stand out from the rest. Being an author myself, I just wished that the author could have come up with a more unique world, imagining things that nobody else could have ever imagined, making the world of their story unique, as all of us are unique too. Well, that's all I have to say, it's a good novel with a lot of potential. Keep working hard author!

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