To be completely honest, the grammar is quite messy. Although its still readable, there are some parts that are unnecessary so u should work on that. This is easily improved by time so its not a big deal. Story wise, it's decent and interesting. Overall, just continue writing and writing cuz "repetition is the mother of learning".
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