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Sicklil
SicklilLv152yr
2023-01-30 23:01

I really feel like certain aspects of the story are just taking away from it. I quite liked the story until the blindness part when it stopped having a MC. after becoming blind it really feels like its 1 chapter about Vincent and 2 chapters about the world. the blindness itself was fairly forced and lasts forever with no reasonable purpose/story benefit. does he grow from being blind? not really does the story progress due to the blindness? only ending the engagement Does the blindness have a defined purpose within any reasonable timeframe? absolutely not. 100 chapters later still blind having almost the same problems as before and more than half the chapters are not about the mc. Another in a long list of 150 chapters that are pretty good and a steep drop off after that. for me as soon as he went blind the focus became the world not the MC. At least half the story from that point became about others acting around him with short bits about his activities. I dont mind the duel but having a 100+ chapter challenge that really seems to make the mc almost irrelevant killed the story for me.

Celestial Era: The Rise of the Full-Time Enhancer

xlntz
4.2
609 Chs

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It_Is_Me_Ttt
It_Is_Me_TttLv4

True, I took a break after the blindness part some time back. I haven't continued yet, just came to see the review first. The blindness was pretty much unnecessary and serve nothing.

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Better than nearly any other on this site. Having read to the 90th chapter I can say these: + No cringe-edge lord characters currently + Interesting plot + Interesting power and system of the mc + Story is progressing nicely + Power is balanced and follow the logic. If mc defeats someone it is because he is higher leveled than them and also has strong items. Nothing like other novels where the story continuously say that level is the strongest but mc defeats 20 lvl higher people easily or 2 realm higher ones.

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Poet_Legion
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I haven't finished the story yet and I'm only in the process of reading it but it's really good so far. besides a few grammar errors and maybe a bit odd on the pacing only at some points though it's an amazing novel. great job author keep up the good work and for anyone wondering what this novel is I will probably give a full detailed review once I finish all the available chapters

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It_Is_Me_Ttt
It_Is_Me_TttLv4

I have read up to the current arc, mostly with free pass, so do pardon me. As much as the concept of this story is good, the writing quality and ideas seems to diminish after a while. First was the sudden marriage thing but later handled cleanly. Second was the sudden lack of magic talent which was supposed to apply to the original Vicent only. It was clear his magic talent was way to superior to most mana practitioners but suddenly, he cant learn next tier mana arts. Third was the sudden blindness which makes no sense and adds little to none to the story. From that point onward, ita like the story just go along with the flow; 'whatever comes'. It became bland without any substantial goal or target. The only end time target is the celestials which also seems bland as things are added as time goes by. There is also no short term target. Vicent just do whatever fits. The romance is also all over the place. Honestly, Yulia would have been a good option along the way but later thrown off. The romance is like a switch, on and off, new and old, and so on. Update stability is really high up there but the story quality dropped really low. Also, some characters are not properly fleshed out, they are more like 'add or do as needed' instead of a 3 dimensional character design. Anyway, I am still hoping for some improvement. If these can be worked on, the story will have a massive improvement and will definently skyrocket. Don't mind my grammar and thanks for the chapters.

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timeawayfromstress
timeawayfromstressLv1

mc's brain doesn't work. mc moves with his emotions. mc beta plays mc.hero.mc tries to die early. system is in the wrong person's hands again :D

2yr
xlntz
xlntzAuthor

Author here! This book is a story about an Enhancer meeting Celestials ( but Sekirei inspired ), Mana, Waifu, Sects and Clans, Barbarians, Mythical Creatures, advanced things and others as he slowly discovers the truth about this world. Is this really a world of sword and magic.. or nah? Anyway, definitely not an OP MC but weak to strong. Aside from that, the System Concept of this is a bit hard core and you'll notice it in just a few chapters. I hope you enjoy reading this as I enjoy writing it. Please leave a review to help this book a little bit if you can. Thanks! xlntz.

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Willys_Wonka
Willys_WonkaLv14

The start was amazing and the concept was unique and had a good thing going for it. The change in story to an unnecessary school arc and going blind for no reason other than to try and make a deeper story ruined it and did nothing but make the writer seem like he ran out of ideas. The use of the cliche aranged marriage and having that go down the drain because some unforseen consequences was also annoying and heavily dissapointing. tl;dr - Started as a 4.5/5 dropped to a 2.6/5 Sad to see it happen.

2yr
Blood_Rock
Blood_RockLv10

He turns blind and the entire plot just stops dead. The story at this point feels like the author is just padding. Important plot points are dropped, character progression takes a nose dive. And the whole clan thing with his fiance just made no sense. I skimmed through another 40 chapters and it's just bleh. How is this rated above 3 stars?

2yr
DragonRiderOfHell
DragonRiderOfHellLv15

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SnoringDragon_
SnoringDragon_Lv5

You can give this a try if you nothing great to read. I found some actions of MC very stupid and couldn't bring myself to read this novel any further.

2yr
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