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89thBAMM
89thBAMMLv32yr
2022-05-21 13:25

The story has a terrible sense of progression. its chapter fifty and the protagonist haven't completed a single mission given by the system....waste of my time

Re: World Apocalypse

R_F_T_S
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324 Chs

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89thBAMM
89thBAMMLv3

the system feels like a foot not and the plot has no pacing 90% of the story feels like filler how do you have a filler chapter in the first 10😩

2yr
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R_F_T_S
R_F_T_SAuthor

Firstly, thanks for the review. Glad to know that you read all fifty chapters available. Now, in my defense, the MC completed the side mission given by the system. The Main mission would take time for him to complete and the Daily mission can't be done at the moment since he doesn't have permission to work with Exo Suits. Also, nothing that has happened so far is filler. Trials, tests, meeting characters, none of that is filler. You may think the story is slow but I can assure you it's not. Maybe you can stick around and wait till it clocks a 100 chapters then you can come back and binge through to understand what I'm saying.

89thBAMM:the system feels like a foot not and the plot has no pacing 90% of the story feels like filler how do you have a filler chapter in the first 10😩
2yr
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89thBAMM
89thBAMMLv3

I'll check back in after 20 more chapters drop. Constructive criticism watch The Closer Look and Literature Devils on YouTube and find out how to write a story.

R_F_T_S:Firstly, thanks for the review. Glad to know that you read all fifty chapters available. Now, in my defense, the MC completed the side mission given by the system. The Main mission would take time for him to complete and the Daily mission can't be done at the moment since he doesn't have permission to work with Exo Suits. Also, nothing that has happened so far is filler. Trials, tests, meeting characters, none of that is filler. You may think the story is slow but I can assure you it's not. Maybe you can stick around and wait till it clocks a 100 chapters then you can come back and binge through to understand what I'm saying.
2yr
2
R_F_T_S
R_F_T_SAuthor

Hehe, Alright then. Thanks for the review though.

89thBAMM:I'll check back in after 20 more chapters drop. Constructive criticism watch The Closer Look and Literature Devils on YouTube and find out how to write a story.
2yr
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Typhlix
TyphlixLv4

It's already to chapter 123, go read it

89thBAMM:I'll check back in after 20 more chapters drop. Constructive criticism watch The Closer Look and Literature Devils on YouTube and find out how to write a story.
2yr
2
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R_F_T_S
R_F_T_SAuthor

Alright, I'm going to act as shameless as other authors. This is my entry for WSA 2022 and I believe that I have improved a lot from my previous works. Now this is a system book but I want you guys to know that it's going to be way different from the cliches you have been subjected to so far. It's a mix of advanced technology and cultivation for one, which is obviously not a new trope, but one that I feel is not given as much attention or at least has not been done right so far. Anyway, I'll just give you guys the pros and cons based off of what I have noticed y'all enjoying on this site. Pros: No harem - This might be a pro or con based on who is reading. character development for not only the main protagonist but all those that will help him in his mission - You won't be seeing any bland side character in this story, yes sir. A world that will be fleshed out as the story progresses - This means there won't be any chapters dedicated to solely exposition. An academy arc with exciting tasks - I'm just going to give a spoiler now and inform you guys that there won't be a tournament arc, at least, not the kind of tournament that has been overdone. Passable grammar and readable tenses - Yeah I had to use Grammarly to ensure that each chapter came out with barely any mistakes, so you guys don't have to worry about getting disturbed in your immersion due to wrong grammar. There won't be romance that ends up offsetting the pace of the story, that's for sure. The story is not as linear as it seems - There will be twists and turns until the final reveal, hehe. I don't know if I'm forgetting any other pros, but I'll add it as the story progresses. Cons : No harem : As I said, this is a tricky subject. Main protagonist slowly gets the strength he needs to fight - This means that if you are looking for an instant power up, then you'd best head elsewhere. He is just a normal shut-in that somehow found himself saving the world, it wouldn't be practical if he suddenly gained the strength to beat up the enemy. The story might be slow on the action in the first twenty chapters, so yeah, that might be a con for some people. Chapter release will mostly be around two chapters per day, I don't think I can go above that. But if the support for this novel is good enough, I just might go ahead and mass release. Well, I guess that's it. I'll leave it up to you guys, the readers, to pick out other pros as well as cons that the story might possess. Don't forget to enjoy the story though, I believe it might just be an upcoming masterpiece, hehe.

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GOHAN9000
GOHAN9000Lv15

The story’s plot is stagnant. The author keeps repeating the same actions from the end of one chapter until the beginning of the next. A third of the story keeps getting repeated. The action is slow to develop and t]he main character hasn’t even gotten close to really starting his main mission. Feeling a little cheated reading a story I had high hopes for

2yr
DoaistDownstairs
DoaistDownstairsLv13

not bad so far, it seem unjust that it only has 3 reviews so I decided to make a review prematurely and alter it later on...................

2yr
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