Review Detail of Deleted857 in Book Transferred

Let's see... The plot is great. Characters seem nice too tho it gets a bit confusing when so many names are used at once and repeated constantly. There are many grammatical errors but they can be fixed with slight editing. There are more than many punctual mistakes which make it a bit difficult to read. Like the double quotes are misplaced a lot. The world background could be explained more. And not to mention the characters. It can give a wide view of the story to readers. The story is going with a good pace and seems interesting. Keep up