Review Detail of OldBone in The Lore

Need more work on writing quality, especially on using passive and active voice. Points of View are also important in order to know who is speaking and to whom. It is also essential to describe the scene well and make sure that the picture you want to show is conveyed well. Update stability is quite well, but it is better to have a strict schedule. This habit is important when you want to cater to fans. This might be the least fan service an author can do and it is good to develop early on. You might do it for fun now, but retaining loyal readers is hard. Story development couldn't be judged within 7 chapters based on your pace so no need to worry for now. Character designs are confusing, please describe them with utmost devotion, and don't just throw in a mob without a prior character setting. The world is also important so you can't skimp on it. You might be writing tropes that are common, but what makes your novel different is defined by your character design and world-building. How you showcase the world and package it as well as how you play the characters will make your novel distinguishable. LEARN while writing.