OldBone
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OldBone1yrPostedNeed more work on writing quality, especially on using passive and active voice. Points of View are also important in order to know who is speaking and to whom. It is also essential to describe the scene well and make sure that the picture you want to show is conveyed well. Update stability is quite well, but it is better to have a strict schedule. This habit is important when you want to cater to fans. This might be the least fan service an author can do and it is good to develop early on. You might do it for fun now, but retaining loyal readers is hard. Story development couldn't be judged within 7 chapters based on your pace so no need to worry for now. Character designs are confusing, please describe them with utmost devotion, and don't just throw in a mob without a prior character setting. The world is also important so you can't skimp on it. You might be writing tropes that are common, but what makes your novel different is defined by your character design and world-building. How you showcase the world and package it as well as how you play the characters will make your novel distinguishable. LEARN while writing.
- OldBone2yrReplied to CloudlessChaser
A4 is a paper size usually used in offices.
Jin reached his storehouse and entered from the side door. Before he proceeded to the underground floor, he created an A4 paper sign and placed it outside. "Not open in the morning for weekdays." - OldBone2yrCommented
poor monsters... nochance of becoming juicy gods
"For the Goblin Dungeon Instance, it will be capped at Grade 3 and that grade will be the Extreme difficulty setting for the instance. Another example would be the next mission you will be undergoing. If you succeed in capturing the Lady Snake, you will get a Grade 2 Dungeon and the capped grade for that dungeon will be at Grade 4." Jin took in the information and started to understand how the dungeon instance mechanics worked. While it seemed simple from the start, some minor things that could enhance the experience of the customers. - OldBone2yrCommented
what a typical Asian mom
"Yes Jin, your performance was below expectations," Yun said in a straight voice. "Still, you completed your mission, and I will issue you your rewards accordingly." - OldBone2yrCommented
dropped
With his senses heightened from the Playful Platypus style, he was able to deduce that the goblins were tired and looking for a place to rest. If they strike now, he might have an advantage against them. - OldBone2yrCommented
he can actually monopolize the energy industry
"You will never need to charge this phone ever again. The battery life is infinite, and you do not need to worry about damaging it. The screen is of top military grade and can stop a bullet. Dropping the phone from 101 floors and I can guarantee not a single scratch on it." - OldBone2yrCommented
so this is where Amon went
Mysterious Old Man - OldBone2yrCommented
The Fool that doesnt belong to this era. The King of Yellow and Black that Wields good luck.
Fools - OldBone2yrCommented
kek... weeds and cracks
"Unfortunately, there are no intact roads in the Blackmarsh Wilderness. Perhaps there's a small section of the road, originating from the Old World, that remains well-preserved along the way. It just has a lot of weeds growing on it. There are certain cracks in the road, but that's just an exception." - OldBone2yrCommented
Amon had stolen time
In the blink of an eye, two months passed. - OldBone2yrReplied to Callahan
if theres a 911th floor, that would be mindblowing...
"…The Entertainment Department decided to hold a staff basketball match at the Rec Center this week on their rest day…" - OldBone2yrCommented
Amon and Adam's mom...
Chen Xianyu looked up. "Li Zhen. You should know her, right? You two used to be neighbors. However, you were young back then, so you might not remember. Sigh, she's also a pitiful person. She got married and had two children. Then, she was transferred to another job with her husband. She was infected and could no longer have children. Meanwhile, her two children died in an accident a few years ago…" - OldBone2yrCommented
He should pray to the King of Yellow and Black that wields good luck
Long Yuehong's lips quivered as he laughed self-deprecatingly. "I don't think I'm the chosen one, but the unlucky one." - OldBone2yrReplied to BushierBrows
but it was also said that it supersedes the setting.
"And you've all heard the rumors that the gateway to the New World lies in the depths of a city ruins, somewhere above the Ashlands. If we never explore it, we'll never be able to enter the New World. We'll always be accompanied by famine, infection, mutation, and monsters. - OldBone2yrCommented
surprise surprise you'll see a foggy sky that conceals the Western Continent
Long Yuehong followed Shang Jianyao in silence for a while. Suddenly, he pursed his lips and softly said, "At least I can see the real sky…" - OldBone2yrCommented
more like... I applied for us
Shang Jianyao tilted his head and said, "I applied for it." - OldBone2yrCommented
This Long Yuehong is plenty annoying. please die for the plot's sake
"…" Long Yuehong waved his hand in front of Shang Jianyao. "Is there really something wrong with your brain? Don't you know how dangerous it is outside?" - OldBone2yrCommentedYang Zhenyuan didn't know how to explain. He turned to Shang Jianyao and sighed. "I never knew marriage is such a tiring thing. However, it's still pretty good. You guys have to find a partner as soon as possible." As he spoke, he unconsciously revealed a smile.
- OldBone2yrReplied to ArrodesKinnie
pakyu
Yang Zhenyuan's face turned red. "I've eaten. I'm just a little tired." - OldBone2yrCommented
isnt this copy-pasted.
"Do you think it's possible for her to like me? Sigh, I'm only 1.75 meters tall after genetic enhancement. My looks are average, and my grades are only average. I wasn't earmarked by any department…."