The world building is fantastic but hopes the elaborate the characters (how they look like?, how are they like?) stuffs like that in the initial chapters so from the start we can form an idea of the main characters. Also the 'i' in the sentences, since you already have a lot of chapters, please start editing the published chapters ☺ I can deal with some grammar errors as a reader. Looking forward to more, keep it up!
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