great story so far(4 chapters). i can see the beginings of a deep magic system that the author has explained beutifully so far. The mc and other characters have a real feel to them. i hope this book picks up in momentum because this novel deserves it. also very few spelling and gramatical errors, almost non existing.

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the story is really good it has action kingdom building and romance that it just makes u want to keep reading to find out want happens next I hope there is more to come

personally I can say that i prefer this development of characters and people in the story of elden ring world and the development and reconstruction of the family bonds of rennals family and the way it is going.

good book and likable mc, with proper research and understanding of the lore from the game. I would recommend if you have an itch for elden ring lore and story. just a bit fast paced for my liking. . .

At the moment I am writing this review, I am at chapter 6. Not sure if what I have to say has already been fixed or not, but here it goes. As far as the story is concerned? It's pretty much perfect. It has a solid pacing - Not too laggy, not too rushed. The concepts are introduced and used in a way I can understand and get behind. The only real issue I can find is the use of capital letters, full stops, minor grammatical issues, so and so. I would suggest using Grammarly, as it helps solve most of these issues (At the same time, grammarly itself makes silly mistakes sometimes, so keep an eye for some details). Really loving the book. Hope you won't drop it. Good luck👍

it is a really good read I hope you keep up the good work. ,...... ......,....................,...............................................

It's one of the best Elden Ring fanfics on the site now. But the author really needs to edit his work better and find a better way to put his thoughs into words, it really is holding back the story full potential.

Writing quality: Really good. It doesn’t feel empty and lifeless like most fanfics on this website. Keeps you engaged in the story. Chapters are pretty long and you don’t even realize 30 minutes have passed and you read 5-7 chapters until something takes you out of it. Some things don’t seem to make sense but it’s hinted it will be cleared up later. Updating stability: Seems good so far. Not really much to say Story development: It started off pretty slow but sped up rally quick all of a sudden. Although a bit quick. I don’t mind. I’d rather have a story be short and good than long and boring. Character design: Characters seem realistic enough. Love how the MC is doing rn. Used my favorite weapon type so it added a lot of points here. Don’t know much about the MC yet. It will build up World background: Elden ring. So can’t really say much besides the author is using a lot of lore and background building. It’s not always in the POV of the MC so you can see how the other characters are doing.

so incredibly good, please increase upload frequency, the wait is killing me. ........................... .... ...............................