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SquirrelFlyTree
SquirrelFlyTreeLv42yr
2022-07-22 05:34

Read until at least chapter nine, as that is where the quality improves. The memories actually make an inpact of kirishima, there is more punctuation, the characters are getting more fleshed out with the chapters progressing through, and there are less spelling errors. A thorough edit may be needed, but with good enough plot it’ll stick.

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LesserCodex
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Thanks I promise to make it better.

Eman_Santil_3480
Eman_Santil_3480Lv4

so is this drop?

SquirrelFlyTree
SquirrelFlyTreeLv4

i don't know, gotta ask the author.

Eman_Santil_3480:so is this drop?
nicholas8293
nicholas8293Lv1

I think he did but he didn't hit the reply button.

SquirrelFlyTree:i don't know, gotta ask the author.
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Monsieur_Dreamer
Monsieur_DreamerLv3

I've read until the end off USJ Incident (ch 10) and so far there are a lot of things that made me stopped reading. -Him being in Kirishima's body never made a huge impact on Kirishima as a character. There's only one way to justify this although it's stupid and lazy, the MC having the same copy of personality as Kirishima would explain that. -The MC being pretentious, the only reason he's helping Izuku is because he knows Izuku's the MC and the chosen one for OFA. Kirishima in canon never bothered to help Izuku so early in the story, in fact, he's actually closer to Bakugo which is crazy to think about. -Kirishima's optimism in the manga is not annoying but the MC tries too hard and instead makes it more annoying. It's a bit nitpicky but yelling along with Present Mic is something he doesn't do, atleast alone then he had the audacity to be embarassed when he's being over the top. He's just seeking attention at that point. -I don't know if this continues on the latest chapters but you tend to skip significant events such as when Shigaraki broke down the UA's gate so a reader was confused when Aizawa made a reference to that when it was not mentioned or atleast not properly explained. -His interaction with Izuku is definitely forced and doesn't seem geniune when he's still the same as Kirishima in the manga. Allmight letting Kirishima in the secret also seems very forced, you mean to tell me that Aizawa or the other UA staff doesn't know about the secret but Kirishima was accepted? -Him being surprised at the Nurse's quirk when it was explained in the anime. Why is he surprised?

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