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Casual7
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2022-07-17 04:09

grammar could be fixed a lil, but it's readable unlike CN's/MTL's. update is a bit inconsistent, so that was 4 stars. story development, 4 stars. character design, i like the fact its a kirishima transmigration, and he's actually gonna be dealt justice and be strong. overall 4.2 stars, just more chapters needed

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LesserCodex
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Thanks for the review and update wise I want to at least 3 times a week but there's this thing when I set goals like that I immediately fail. So I kind of do it when I feel like it but I'll work on it promise. And for grammar I don't know how I lenglish with a B but at least it's readable.

LesserCodex
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Also, what's CN's? I know MTL machine translation but not that one.

Casual7
Casual7Lv3

chinese novel

LesserCodex:Also, what's CN's? I know MTL machine translation but not that one.
LesserCodex
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Hi, thanks again for the review if it's not too much to ask can I get your opinion of chapter 9 I rewrote it using and was wondering if the grammar quality increased I used Grammarly and prowrittingaid. I'd appreciate your opinion. If it's improved then I'll use this process for future chapters.

Casual7
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it's improved for sure, still very little amount of mistakes tho. it would be better if u kept it like this tho, rather than constantly changing

LesserCodex:Hi, thanks again for the review if it's not too much to ask can I get your opinion of chapter 9 I rewrote it using and was wondering if the grammar quality increased I used Grammarly and prowrittingaid. I'd appreciate your opinion. If it's improved then I'll use this process for future chapters.
LesserCodex
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Alright then I can do that from now on, thanks for taking the time to do this.

Casual7:it's improved for sure, still very little amount of mistakes tho. it would be better if u kept it like this tho, rather than constantly changing
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Monsieur_Dreamer
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I've read until the end off USJ Incident (ch 10) and so far there are a lot of things that made me stopped reading. -Him being in Kirishima's body never made a huge impact on Kirishima as a character. There's only one way to justify this although it's stupid and lazy, the MC having the same copy of personality as Kirishima would explain that. -The MC being pretentious, the only reason he's helping Izuku is because he knows Izuku's the MC and the chosen one for OFA. Kirishima in canon never bothered to help Izuku so early in the story, in fact, he's actually closer to Bakugo which is crazy to think about. -Kirishima's optimism in the manga is not annoying but the MC tries too hard and instead makes it more annoying. It's a bit nitpicky but yelling along with Present Mic is something he doesn't do, atleast alone then he had the audacity to be embarassed when he's being over the top. He's just seeking attention at that point. -I don't know if this continues on the latest chapters but you tend to skip significant events such as when Shigaraki broke down the UA's gate so a reader was confused when Aizawa made a reference to that when it was not mentioned or atleast not properly explained. -His interaction with Izuku is definitely forced and doesn't seem geniune when he's still the same as Kirishima in the manga. Allmight letting Kirishima in the secret also seems very forced, you mean to tell me that Aizawa or the other UA staff doesn't know about the secret but Kirishima was accepted? -Him being surprised at the Nurse's quirk when it was explained in the anime. Why is he surprised?

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