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2022-10-30 02:11

man.... I feel that the mc is very passive when it comes to women and he is also so disinterested in the world that it gets boring, and there was almost no character development in these 50 chapters, his only development was when he saw thousands of women in franssi from the devil's curse but then there was no character development and he doesn't take matters from life to death seriously, like he walks into a den full of powerful monsters like he's walking in an amusement park, even though he's in the early stages of cultivation that's not good at all it's so boring I'm here to see how far he will change his passive behavior and character development

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Bro, can you help me list traits that makes an MC great? From what you told: 1. Proactive 2. Seriousness about his own life and death 3. Interests, ambitions, goals... (It's so easy to let small things slip while creating characters and writing... And I can see myself making mistakes like the second point...)

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