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2022-05-03 18:09

The first chapter had an interesting start. It was quite sad too, I can really feel the sadness. And the best part, you start it with showing and don't tell. I don't really mind the cliches because each novel starts with a sad story. Keep on writing, it's good and praiseworthy. Great Job!

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Sorry, to put it correctly, some novels that start with sad story cliches. You did it fine because you start it with loads of expressions.

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