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Jack_Dragneel_9877Lv32yr
2022-04-30 05:43

The author decided to isekai characterfrom other series. One example is Akainu.///////////////////////__//__////////////////////////////=/===/========

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Fushii
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Okay story for a fanfic. You will know very little about his surroundings. You don't really develop any feelings for the characters because the they are too bland. Everything is circling around the mc and how strong he is getting which makes the story very bland and not very fun to read. I pushed through to chapter 20 and I wouldn't say I was enjoying it. It was intresting in the beginning but the author started to make the mc contradict everything he does, for an example he wants to become the symbol of peace but in order to do that you need to be strong. But the mc is holding back his power for some unknown reason which doesn't make sense to me. And it feels like the mc is alone all the time and his interaction is only because he wants something with that character. And when he starts UA you think it will be better because the characters are already made up for the author to use, but more wrong could I not be. He has 0 interactions with the other characters in his class. The first person he does have a monologue with is Mineta and it was only a forced comedy monologue that weren't even funny. The author needs to learn how to implement other characters to his story so it wont be so bland. And he really needs to stop contradict what the mc is trying to do. His goal is in his case to be the symbol of peace and to be that he needs power but he is holding back, like a lot. You know little to non about where he is. All we know is that he lives in a orphanage but the other children are only mentioned like once in the story. The writing quality is okay for a fanfic. And you should listen to your readers as they are there to support you and give you ideas.

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