Review Detail of MTL_Lopes in Tokyo Video Game Tycoon

can I get a link for that?

Will you consider fixing the grammar and editing so more people enjoy the novel.

If I can understand the language it will be a great idea

If this were edited I would have liked to read it here. But it's even worse than the one on mtlnovel so I'll read it there. I'll mention a few things I noticed in chapter 1. First of all, capital letters: there are none. Then some sentences seem to have words added in that shouldn't be there. For example in this mtl you copied from somewhere in chapter 1 paragraph 2: 'and in this attic, there is a person sitting in front of a lamp assembling some kind of electronic device.' But mtlnovel is like this: 'In this attic, there is a person sitting in front of a lamp assembling some kind of electronic equipment.'