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Daoist7LifesLv11yr
2023-06-10 05:15

>> Read this till 280 chapter. I was really looking forward to this novel. The idea of MC being famous coz of Alchemist profession was great but till Chapter 280 there is not an ounce of alchemy involved (it might be there in later chapters but it would have been better if MC mentioned it in earlier chapters on his plans and all)World building is nice. >> Character development is okay.>> Character growth and connections with others is kinda lame. >> Starting was good and I was really looking forward to it. Later, the story keeps me thinking as if written by some 16 yr old kid.>> @Author Don't get me wrong. I've nothing against you and I would love to see this novel grow more beautifully.I would love to help if you are looking for somebody to proofread.>> I would really like it if we could connect (to bounce some ideas) Pls reply back if u r okay with it and I will send my email.

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Thank you for the review and the offered help. I should have mentioned in the start that this novel would reach at least 1000 chapters. half of which is Ren's journey to being an Alchemist and the remaining half is the story of him being one. Now we're halfway there and he's already an Alchemist and he's on his way to collect recipes.

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**HONEST REVIEW FROM A REAL READER** Hey Everyone, Just thought I'd leave my review here now that I (as a reader) have read more than 143 chapters. I believe my review will be a lot more insightful than people who have only read it for 20 or so chapters. First of all **GENERAL OVERVIEW** TLDR [for those looking to skim]: This novel is quite like your MMORPG novels. However, for those who like this genre this novel ticks all the boxes. The main character is resourceful and knows how to use opportunities from past experience to create a good head-start. He has good values and is not forceful of his opinion on others and values relationships. The damage and stat numbers are also quite balanced and I must say the class structure towards an Alchemist is very interesting and is not what you expect from a typical alchemist with those skills that Ren (The MC) Has. *PROS* : * Character Development: Ren and the people around him all have a good backstory to them. They are all connected and the good thing is that there are chapters which does not just focus on Ren only where we are allowed to look into other people's perspectives and their own respective journeys. * Abilities and their Usage The abilities that the author has come up with is definitely interesting. I would say they are the reason why I was hooked and continued to read. I really enjoy the abilities the author has created for Ren as they are very unique and have not been seen before. The way he uses the abilities are also quite planned out which adds more to the novel's flavor. *Side characters involvement and stories This is one of the best aspect of this novel: You get to understand the side characters who follow the MC that aren't just robots who are discarded later on once MC is oh so strong. They help out and their background is solid enough for you to expect them to be of help. *CONS* : * World Building [this one isn't too much of a con] So far it is not bad as the world of the novel is quite thoroughly explained and the back and forth between in real life and in game is interesting. It shows a good contrast BUT now even 143 chapters into the novel, the world building is not too clear and the direction for the future needs to be more fleshed out to create a higher sense of anticipation * Grammar and Writing This one is slightly ick-y. There are quite a number of grammatical mistakes which affects the flow of the chapter. This is evident in most of the novels here on Webnovel. However, 'MMORPG Rebirth as an Alchemist' have more of these errors and I understand that the author is looking for an editor. It is not absolutely terrible and is to be honest decent but does create a jarring sensation. Depth and Gravity of the Challenges/Plot: This con has nothing to do with how Ren fights his enemies or how the author describes the fight scenes. They are all good from what I've read. What I mean with this con is that, there needs to be a linkage between what Ren does and what he's going to do. How well he utilizes his rewards to better himself or his future self. Furthermore, there is a lack of details towards a future goal or emphasis on what is to go from a certain point from X to Y. For example: (not a spoiler as this doesn't happen in the novel - just for examples sake) Ren kills a snake dungeon boss and receives a scepter of magic water that is superior to any weapon in the game. There needs to be an internal thought dilemma as to whether he utilizes it for himself, saves it for a future team partner, sells for money to help his family or himself, blueprint it, or use it as an extended quest line. What I am trying to say is deepen the plot with each plot that appears and show how they can link with each other and to be more detailed with certain events so that readers can expect the unexpected. Thank you <3 :D

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