**HONEST REVIEW FROM A REAL READER** Hey Everyone, Just thought I'd leave my review here now that I (as a reader) have read more than 143 chapters. I believe my review will be a lot more insightful than people who have only read it for 20 or so chapters. First of all **GENERAL OVERVIEW** TLDR [for those looking to skim]: This novel is quite like your MMORPG novels. However, for those who like this genre this novel ticks all the boxes. The main character is resourceful and knows how to use opportunities from past experience to create a good head-start. He has good values and is not forceful of his opinion on others and values relationships. The damage and stat numbers are also quite balanced and I must say the class structure towards an Alchemist is very interesting and is not what you expect from a typical alchemist with those skills that Ren (The MC) Has. *PROS* : * Character Development: Ren and the people around him all have a good backstory to them. They are all connected and the good thing is that there are chapters which does not just focus on Ren only where we are allowed to look into other people's perspectives and their own respective journeys. * Abilities and their Usage The abilities that the author has come up with is definitely interesting. I would say they are the reason why I was hooked and continued to read. I really enjoy the abilities the author has created for Ren as they are very unique and have not been seen before. The way he uses the abilities are also quite planned out which adds more to the novel's flavor. *Side characters involvement and stories This is one of the best aspect of this novel: You get to understand the side characters who follow the MC that aren't just robots who are discarded later on once MC is oh so strong. They help out and their background is solid enough for you to expect them to be of help. *CONS* : * World Building [this one isn't too much of a con] So far it is not bad as the world of the novel is quite thoroughly explained and the back and forth between in real life and in game is interesting. It shows a good contrast BUT now even 143 chapters into the novel, the world building is not too clear and the direction for the future needs to be more fleshed out to create a higher sense of anticipation * Grammar and Writing This one is slightly ick-y. There are quite a number of grammatical mistakes which affects the flow of the chapter. This is evident in most of the novels here on Webnovel. However, 'MMORPG Rebirth as an Alchemist' have more of these errors and I understand that the author is looking for an editor. It is not absolutely terrible and is to be honest decent but does create a jarring sensation. Depth and Gravity of the Challenges/Plot: This con has nothing to do with how Ren fights his enemies or how the author describes the fight scenes. They are all good from what I've read. What I mean with this con is that, there needs to be a linkage between what Ren does and what he's going to do. How well he utilizes his rewards to better himself or his future self. Furthermore, there is a lack of details towards a future goal or emphasis on what is to go from a certain point from X to Y. For example: (not a spoiler as this doesn't happen in the novel - just for examples sake) Ren kills a snake dungeon boss and receives a scepter of magic water that is superior to any weapon in the game. There needs to be an internal thought dilemma as to whether he utilizes it for himself, saves it for a future team partner, sells for money to help his family or himself, blueprint it, or use it as an extended quest line. What I am trying to say is deepen the plot with each plot that appears and show how they can link with each other and to be more detailed with certain events so that readers can expect the unexpected. Thank you <3 :D
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LIKETo the author: I want to say you are doing a great job so don't feel pressured or sad at this review. This is all constructive criticism and we all have our own struggles and I understand you still need an editor. However, your novel is still in the early pre-200 chapters so a lot can still be implemented and improved. Just keep going as you do and see where fit to improve as the novel does have potential!
thank you very much for the detailed review. and all your key points are correct. i intentionally dont tap deep in the world yet as the story is in its early phase. yes, even in 150 plus chap, we're still in the first month of the game 😂 i will stick this. if only all reviews are like yours 🙏
when does the romance start author? i am into 30 or so chps
it will come soon
by soon meaning before 100 chps or who haven't wrote it yet so....soon
i think i already wrote t 😀
Good review you make me want to delete mine and do it better
Thank you my friend. I will be reading this novel. :)
Why no editor? Just curious. Because mostly, you need people/one person to read the story and edit it on the fly, too.
still in the process of finding one. all that applied was worst than me in editting 😅
How did they applied for that? 😂 Curiously, I often miss apps that lack simple suggestion functions, so the author just has to read those and can simple click "replace". would be awesome, but nooo
through fb. no one s aplyng right now though 😅
I could be interested. Editing or suggesting while reading the first time is always easy and nicely done. Just tell me where or what. Or make a discord server? ^^
Is there is alchemy or not cuz there is not even a hint about it apart of the novel name :)
you obviously didn't read it properly by chapter 94 it is still day 2 since game came out
Hope youre finding it Enjoyable !
Im glad you like the review. Thanks for all the hardwork ;)
I get what you mean which is why pacing and world building is among the cons but author is working to fix this and if it is any sense of alleviation for you, although pacing is weird, The reading experience is not. You dont really feel like only 2 Days has passed with all the event that happens. However, I do agree that 2 days by chap 94 is a bit unusual but the story is good
if only 2 days have passed by chapter 94 then that isn't good writing I can give you some suggestions of better novels if you want
if the time changed that his school was still on holiday and he spent like a week real time (maybe 3 weeks game time) doing all that he did so far it be better another improvement making it that players can only play say from midnight to 7 am this prevents others from getting ahead of him if he has something to do that day. it allows for a more varied age range of players, wouldn't prevent people from their daily life as it be played while sleeping
