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2022-03-29 09:50

Mini review of the few chapters there are. First "Peaky Blinders" fanfic I've read, I hope I'm not disappointed xd. Writing quality: English is not my main language, I think there were minor errors, nothing to disturb reading. Update Stability: There are only 10 chapters, not much to say. Development of the story: Medium slow, and the chapters are very short for me. And from what I read, it seems that the protagonist does not like the Shelby family. Character design: Very few chapters to comment on the personality of the MC, but with those 10 chapters the personality of the MC seems absurd to me, and he loses his temper easily. World Fund: There is nothing, but apparently it will be the same as the series "Peaky Blinders" Overall Score: 3.6

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Thank you for your constructive feedback. I really appreciate such people. But I also want to add something from myself. At the expense of the stability of the update - 10 chapters. I write 1 chapter a day, I do not think that 1000 words per chapter is a small chapter, perhaps there is not much going on in the chapter, but this is only because I want to familiarize readers with my character as quickly as possible, how the system works, his priorities and his opinion on the account the situation in this world, so as to start a full chapter soon when the plot itself begins. World background? Dude, tell me something else. Fan fiction for that and fan fiction to follow the way the book or movie is going on which it actually goes. I have all.

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