The main story is good. The idea of the main character and his surroundings sounds good. But the biggest turn-off for me was the system. It does not suit the era and the story at all. Especially one that sounds more like a human than an ai. Because of the system, I had to skip when mc interacts with the system because all of the sudden, the tone and vibe of the story change from a dark world to a sunny and full of light one. If you want to include a system to that kind of world, take a read at the Unbound (Multiverse: The Walking Dead, Game of Thrones?). The author of this novel implanted a system that suits the current world/theme of the story. It is not interactive, it is not focused. It just exists there and you forget about it unless the mc uses it directly. I'm being harsh here because the story has a lot of potential. If done right, it should explode. Especially since I can't find peaky blinders fanfiction that is, well, stories and not full-on romances that don't make sense.
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If you don't like the system, you can see that even in the name of the fan fiction it says that it's a system, then what's the point of reading if you don't like it? And leave a bad review based on personal preference?
Bro like Imma be real with you, your responses to these “criticism” aint funny. reviews are there for the readers to express what they like or dislike about a story and yet here you are replying with the same old “dont like dont read”. its really pathetic. if you cant take criticism then just stop writing.
