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Well, the MC explain his abilities to almost everyone he talks, he takes dumb descision after dumb descision and finally put all his points in LUCK stat and it makes the story utterly uninteresting as everything is resolved by the MC sheer dumb luck, as I said uninteresting.

I think this fic is very good in the regards that author-san is trying to show the mc as a human with many flaws. The way he acts in the first chaps can be a turned off for many people but if you look at things from another angle then some of his actions can be reasonable. I mean he just got transported to a fiction world and in the early stages of the plot right off the bat so he hasn't exactly gotten the chance to familiarized himself with the world and see it is a real place with real people. That mentality was then stuck with him through out the following chaps and can be seen from his actions with characters, so I hope that initiation can be a turning point for him in viewing the world more differently. Also the gamer system, I think should get more highlight because this fic is about it after all. It's literally the embodiment of hax with all of it's functions and ultilization once Albus unlock them.

Eh, Don't like the mc, there's a difference between being naive, flawed or utterly stupid...................................................

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Its good! though at the start i was very annoyed that MC was telling everyone about his powers and thankfully he realized he was being extremely stupid. Also... well the status system needs to be reworked. Its also interesting that he is developing the telekinesis tree to get different powers. Im just sad that this dosnt has adult content.

Well... the idea is good, the grammar is not bad, world background is very solid and charactee is not bad but the i believe the system fails. The author tried to implement the gamer system, but he dosnt knows what he is doing and did not think things through and added all kinds of skills which will cause him to drop things when he needs to calculate stuff and has made some flat increases to some stats and the progression of the status is completely linear. Example... at 9 AGI, he gets 9% dodge, at 100 agi, he gets 100% dodge... *shakes head*. Thats not how it works. it would be better to be vague about it so that author can maneuver around. Such as, at 9 agi he can dodge a tenis ball thrown at him. And that at 100 dodge, he can evade bullets from a normal pistol. but he will get hit if its from a sniper rifle for example. as he cannot the sniper rifle bullet as its goes way faster than a normal pistol

Recommend. author well informed. knows what they are doing. I am Yoshikage Kira. I’m 33 years old. My house is in the northeast section of Morioh, where all the villas are, and I am not married. I work as an employee for the Kame Yu department stores, and I get home every day by 8 PM at the latest. I don’t smoke, but I occasionally drink. I’m in bed by 11 PM, and make sure I get eight hours of sleep, no matter what. After having a glass of warm milk and doing about twenty minutes of stretches before going to bed, I usually have no problems sleeping until morning. Just like a baby, I wake up without any fatigue or stress in the morning. I was told there were no issues at my last check-up. I’m trying to explain that I’m a person who wishes to live a very quiet life. I take care not to trouble myself with any enemies, like winning and losing, that would cause me to lose sleep at night. That is how I deal with society, and I know that is what brings me happiness. Although, if I were to fight I wouldn’t lose to anyone.

interesting